escucho tus secretos con cautela.
El tiempo transcurriendo tan deprisa;
yo, de cerca descubro tu sonrisa.
A la luna quisiera yo llevarte;
vivir el arte de lograr amarte.
Anímate a participar en este concurso de @fran-mazz en conjunto con @celfmagazine. Revisa aquí las bases del concurso
El tiempo transcurriendo tan deprisa;
yo, de cerca descubro tu sonrisa.
Me encantó. Suerte querida mosquetera.
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Gracias :D
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Buen trabajo Zuni. Rima y medida perfectas.
Desde el punto de vista formal. Si va punto y coma al final del primer verso, el segundo comienza con letra minúscula.
Desde el punto de vista del ritmo,en el último pareado tal vez yo cambiase el orden de las palabras, para que fluyese más fácil, pero es una opinión totalmente subjetiva, ya que el ritmo también depende de la entonación que se le imprima y cada poeta siente y decide la suya.
Suerte.
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Muchas gracias mi estimada, sus sugerencias siempre son oportunas y bienvenidas. Saludos
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Un abrazo, amiga @zuni
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De verdad se ve muy interesante el pareado (primeramente porque es más sencillo) me llama mucho la atención. Suerte en el concurso mi zuni <3 ¡espero ganes! Yo me enteré tarde.
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Muchass gracias amiguito @hernanmrtnz. A pesar de lo sencillo me costo la vida esta participación jajaj la métrica no es lo mío. Saludos querido mosquetero.
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Bellisima poesía mi estimada Zuni!!! Un fuerte abrazo desde Chile!!!
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Saludos mi amigo.
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Corto y preciso, me gusto mucho, espero leer mas
Saludos 🙋
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Nos estamos leyendo :D
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Me gustó esta frase: yo, de cerca descubro tu sonrisa.. Me arriesgué a participar también amiga. Suerte para ambas!
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Te estaré leyendo :D
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Saludos amiga, muy linda, exitos!
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Gracias por pasarte por aquí :D
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muy bonito!! so good!!
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Muchísimas gracias!!!
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Me gusto mucho, un poco corto pero bastante bueno. saludos. <3
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Me costo la vida solamente llegar a esas tres estrofas jajaj no es mi fuerte. Muchas gracias por leerme :D
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Hermoso pareado, me gustó mucho. Mi estrofa favorita fue la primera. Felicidades por el segundo lugar :)
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Felicidades a ti tambien jeje... Gracias a ti fue que me enteré.
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Excelente ^^ bien merecida esa victoria, poetiza.
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Muchas gracias estimado nefe!
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Que bello zuni, "A la luna quisiera yo llevarte; vivir el arte de lograr amarte." me encanto.
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Gracias manitaa bella :D
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Merecido ese 2do lugar te felicito @zuni..
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Graciasssss :D
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