The story itself is kind of good.But you seriously need to work on your grammar.
Another tip is that you can read more creepypasta's that are more popular and get the touch how to write them and build them up to the point it excites people.
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CREEPYPASTA Mr.Loop
Thank you for the feedback ill work on my grammar next time i write a story like this and this is also my first creepypasta i plan on doing more for the future and I got alot to work on if im going to write another creepypasta like this again thanks for the feedback.
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