This dreamland feels like home
~~~~~~~original poetry~~~~~~~---with art by @bitcoinman---
A flat plane tugged by etheric pulleys
Like a runaway elevator:
I am shot ataxic
By the world rifle
Into a sea of strife
And mingling love.
A past in my hands that melts,
Runs like sand to join eternity
Coalesces through my future
Dim with promise held
In lucid eyes.
These orbs are not my own,
With torment shine and triumph too:
Yet my own dissolves, all shared to reign
A kingdom bright, festooned with cosmic mane.
A land where noble birth
& lineage lofty
To every soul's extended
A land where land itself
The beings become
All distance, rank rescinded.
Written by
Daniel Pendergraft
1/5/18
Notes
The theme of this piece is the diverse sensations experienced in dream states and the intense feeling of familiarity and "realness" encountered (while still asleep) which the logical mind then rationalizes away. There is a meltingness to dream, a feeling of boundaries become blurred, a feeling of timelessness. People can transform into other people, we can observe ourselves from a distance, we can become someone else entirely; here ranks and distinctions dissolve: everything is noble, everything sacred, everything profound with implication. Many times there is a great disappointment upon awakening, with the intuition that the experiences in the dream realms are "more real" than "real life."
I decided to use some images created by @bitcoinman in this one, because his art conjures the magic & abstraction of dream well. I will be giving 25% of the SBD payout of this post to him out of appreciation for the dedication and consistency he has shown on Steemit. Be sure to check out his blog and support his experiments in photomanipulation! Here are the links to the original posts of the images I used:
Always honoured to have my pieces featured next to your immaculate work. I am happy to be part of this great community and this whole cryptocurrency movement, its almost as if the dream is becoming a reality.
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Hey d-pend! Good one. I like how you are experimenting with moving the notes/analysis to AFTER the actual poem, which allows the reader to give the piece a "virgin" AND THEN skip to the notes during or after the read. I also like how you used an actual artist's work (as you have in the past, and as I suggested in my comment last week). I like how your posts are progressing and becoming more digestible on all levels. Just my personal take, as usual...
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I like that too, it allows me to form my own impressions before reading your notes. Nicely done.
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Complex poem to say the least :)
What if dreams are not dreams?
Maybe they are just a visit to some parallel realities? :)
I've been astral projecting in my dreams since youngest of ages, and I can tell you one thing... It was real ;)
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This was really beautiful. It is sometimes unsettling how real dreams can seem. I could feel the disappointment in which you referred through the whole piece. Reminded me of a dear friend who is having a difficult time with life right now.
And thank you for offering your notes and thoughts on the piece. Lots of creators do not, and I think it adds so much to an audience's experience.
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Dreamland feels like home, like something we can touch, like something we can feel but still mixed with the leftovers from our past and rays of future...Oh,...Dreamland You are so close and so far...Please Noble take a birth in My Dreamland...
Your poetry is always fool of hidden sorrow and resignation...At least I feel like it...
Of course full of knowledge, where is the best happiness for us...
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The mix and use of words in your poem is as surreal as the dreamscape itself . it's nice. My first 2 or 3 posts on steemit were from my lucid dream journals, I find dreams fascinating too. Checking out @bitcoinman's works, he does some good dreamy art. It's cool
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We pass through the transition of the sandy form, the deeper meaning of the folding of the material plane, while the spirit observes the poetry of eternity.
You are a very grateful man, I'm going to look at the posts of your friend and true artist.
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In fact "A past in my hands that melts,
Runs like sand to join eternity"
Love these lines and totally agree. One shouldn't grab ones head and always thing about past. #thanks @d-pend . You are quite interesting.
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Hi Daniel! Its so cold here it must be worse in Boone stay warm my friend, I loved your poem as you know I'm a huge fan and I look forward to them, bravo!😊
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I was reading and I was seeing images in my head! This was a cool imagination excercise! :D
Thanks for writing!
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I didn't comment for a while on this one because it took some time to let the words sink in. I am following you here into a dream world. Someone could definitely write a short story about this land. The closest I've seen was the "woods between worlds" one of the chapters of the Magician's Nephew by C.S. Lewis. If you have a minute it is a worthwhile read.
Look at chapter 3 page 16, "The wood beyond worlds"
http://www.samizdat.qc.ca/arts/lit/PDFs/MagiciansNephew_CSL.pdf
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Everyone needs a respite from real life, dreams are the minds way of clearing out the garbage. Great writing once again🐓
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Wonder Full Content !! Liked it
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I wonder where I went to when God was sharing the talent of writing poem.
Nice one
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Excellent !!! All that we see or seem Is but a dream within a dream
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I can @d-pend on you for quality content. Always a worthy upvote.
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i am sorry but i would like this poetry to be explained i cannot understand much of it :(
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Very mystical, in a good way. It reminds me of William Blake, and I would not make that comparison lightly! Beautiful
I'm new here and looking for ways to get involved in the poetry community on this site. Do you have any tips? Contests or curators, for instance?
here are some poems of mine:
https://mspsteem.com/poetry/@bennettitalia/capitulation-a-poem-by-bennettitalia
https://mspsteem.com/poetry/@bennettitalia/honesty-a-poem-by-bennettitalia
https://mspsteem.com/poetry/@bennettitalia/homeless-a-poem-by-bennettitalia
https://mspsteem.com/poetry/@bennettitalia/original-poem-by-bennettitalia
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Also, LOVE the title. It's like a poetry one-liner
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@originalworks
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Beautiful poem , thanks for it and have a nice day
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Pictures, like poetry, are magnificent. It is a pity that he appreciated only the meaning of poetry..
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just awsome ...i like your writing style and painting to nice post wish you best of luck
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I like the paintings, so deep and as well your poetry. Nice:)
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Wow this write-up is wonderful. I promise I'm going to be reading all your post. Keep it up
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Beautiful lines and thoughts as always Daniel. Love reading them. Regards Nainaz.
#thealliance
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Wow. so lovely i promise to follow you and reading all your post
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Beautiful post i like it
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Excellent post, very well articulated. thank you so much.
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d-pend!! Thank you, your Post.
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