THE SUN IS NOT MY FRIEND
I am scared of the sun, its heat,
The light it brings; it burns, it singes
And stings my broken skin.
It peels me open and layers upon layers
Of mould, of rust, of cobwebs, or dust are revealed.
It bares me, unclothes me
And puts me in the centre;
Unprotected, uncovered, revealed.
I am scared of this truth;
The crisp sizzling spark of melting lies,
Of exposed parts, long pinned in the dark.
I do not want to be seen,
Bared, naked, open before the world.
I need the darkness of night
To clothe me, drape me in shadows;
To hide my sins, my stains, my broken skin.
I do not trust the sun;
It gives me no room to soar;
It shackles me and upbraids me;
It breaks me and shames me.
But the moon; oh the moon its silver light
Becalms me, soothes the thrashing waves
Of my beleaguered soul and takes me home
To a place where my sins mean nothing,
And the darkness that crouch within me
Is but a charcoal stain
Easily cleaned with a kiss.
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Wow! This is beautifully written @warpedpoetic! Thanks for sharing :)
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You are welcome. Thanks for stopping by
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"It peels me open and layers upon layers
Of mould, of rust, of cobwebs, or dust are revealed."
"...and takes me home
To a place where my sins mean nothing,
And the darkness that crouch within me
Is but a charcoal stain
Easily cleaned with a kiss."
WOW! @warpedpoetic this poem is so powerful it struck me physically when I read it, I felt the words in my body. Its imagery is mystical and at the same time so immediate and vivid. This is inspiring me to want to try for more creative use of imagery.
The internal rhythm is seamless and musical. I also like the way it flips the perception of night as the cold, dark place and daytime as the comforting, warm one.
I really loved this :)
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Yeah me too. I have been reading it over and over again. Lol... I have always loved the dark. Thanks for the love and for stopping by
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❤️
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Oh, the seekers of darkness, of shade. Lovely, this, @warpedpoetic. There is an intensity in these lines that makes me want to protect you from the light, but then, there is that bit of hope that it won't be so bad if you let in a bit of it, at a time...
Congrats on the curie!
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I do just that, let it in in small bits. I am more of a owl. The moon light gives the world a certain kind of mystery and beauty. Even something ugly can become beautiful in the shadows but the sun reveals all.
Thanks, the curie was a sweet surprise I tell you. Thanks for stopping by. Peace
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The post really revealed some secrets.. Lol
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Wow lovely post
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I dislike the sun too.
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I love it
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perhaps it's a love hate relationship - how we love the things we don't trust
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Yes. I can't depend on it to protect my secrets but it can be overwhelming in all its light.
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On another thread yesterday, i read poem about the ocean - @jazzybells - the power we hear in it's waves can be at once tranquil and overwhelming at the same time. It boils down i suppose to how comfortable we are with the final sum of things - our secrets, why we keep them, and our deeds, and why we do them
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Yes and also how much of nature's children we truly are. We hide stuff from father for fear of his wrath but we tell mother everything because she seems to understand.
I think our natural environment marks us as much as our society does.
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Hi @warpedpoetic. I really like the way your poem plays with perception. The main theme of the fear of the sun cleverly plays off our expectations of the fear of the dark, I like the way you flipped it! Also your unique use of language in metaphor:
Really nice poetry :-)
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oh thank you sire. I find that light reveals too many things I want to hide. I actually love to sit in the dark and think. I feel safer in the darkness of my room. It feels like a womb for me. I don't know if I am making sense. 😂
Thanks for stopping by though, hope to see you again. Peace.
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Very well written. But I still love the sun ! A very enjoyable and interesting read nevertheless.
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I love the sun too... 😂 It just don't love me back 😔
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The sun is such a hot friend we think he's not a friend. He makes life to start, the energy for photosynthesis. Maybe if you get to know him better, you'll just know you don't have to go closer...
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Hmm. The sun is necessary for life. I used the sun metaphorically here though. I meant light in general and how it exposes everything. You can not hide in the light, you cannot lie either to yourself or to others.
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Yeah... I understand that.
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Great work! I tend to skulk in the dark myself, in fact some days I don't even open the window blinds.
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That's more like it. I love that cozy feeling. It's as if the room is a cocoon, a womb of sorts. The heat, the noise, the chill on the outside does not get to you; you stay aloof from the struggle of the world. For that period, you are alone and one with your thoughts.
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Although the sun is my friend i think your poem was well written and engaging. If you dont sin then you will have nothing to hide. As a sun gazer and while looking at the sun I discovered something that I will share with you now...you can forgive yourself my friend. Tomorrow is a new day and a fresh slate. Best wishes.
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Hmm... I have no issue with the sun.It is a metaphor for light, for revelation, illumination in the sense that it exposes secrets and lies. I just feel it reveals too much. Everybody has a secret he or she wants hidden.
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I really like this one! I hope you continue to do spoken word and maybe can be able to record in better sound quality!
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I recorded with my phone. I will see what I can do about the sound though, thank you for the observation.
I will definitely do other spoken word poetry. I find it an interesting do.
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