I like the feel of this story. The voice sounds immature, like Arrow is the one telling us what's happening. I caught plenty of grammar and punctuation errors but fixing them would destroy that feel, and I think sometimes style is more important than having everything in its proper place.
Looking forward to the next installment!
Good catch. It was written with a more YA kind of feel.
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