Recently we’ve been working on writing third person limited POV (point of view). Our assignment for one of the workshops was:
100 words (more or less) of a scene in 3rd person limited that has at least three characters and includes dialogue from all three.
I took a shot at it and produced this which is about 137 words:
“You want me to wipe that look off your face!”
June stiffened, eyeing the strap in her mother’s hand. One word, twitch, flicker — would launch the war.
The glare from her mother demanded immediate response. June knew that look. Knew it well.
Deep breath and answer very carefully. “Noooo.” The hand drove up and back. June prepared for the snap of leather on skin.
Silence - the battle paused. June dared to look.
Having secured her mother’s wrist, her father looked at June. “Clean that milk up.”
"Yes Dad.” She turned to the sink for the cloth. Resting her hand on it, she paused and glanced toward her parents.
Her mother's dark gaze turned its fury on her dad. He released his grip, letting her hand drop, and stepped back. Her mother moved toward him.
The battle resumed.
Until Next Time — Just Steem on
Wow, so much character in such a short piece. Well done.
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thank you @gmuxx ... was a fun workshop
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I love this. You did so much with so few words. With this short little piece, we get the whole family dynamic. Excellent work, @shadowspub. You nailed it!
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It's an interesting challenge to write tightly enough to get the action into a small number of words.
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Where are you doing the writing workshop? It sounds like fun!
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We're doing them in @thewritersblock Discord. We'd love to have you! Click the gif and you'll see how to join.
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Thanks!!
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that little one ever decides to make her appearance in the world you may enjoy the distraction of doing the workshop.
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a dark piece, Shadows, but I like it, very good!
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thanks Skip .. definitely not sugar cubes and unicorns eh
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Wow Shadows, this is incredibly powerful- so much emotion and tension in such a short piece- so well done! E x
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thank you @eveningart ... maybe join us? you'd be a great addition with the writing talent I've seen from you
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Thank you! I've joined TWB and just trying to get my head around how it all works and what happens when. Thank you so much for the compliment. E x
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Great piece of fiction! It is difficult to capture a story in so few words, but you nailed it!
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thanks @thekittygirl it was an interesting challenge
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this is seriously cool beans!!
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thanks @eaglespirit
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