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Hi everyone I am fine and I hope that you all will be also fine.Today I am here to write a story about the two friends in the community known as Freewriters Community.
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Once their was a farmer who named Akbar who day his sone whose name was Ali went to his friend house and they both decidedto do an adventure for this they required some money So they call their parentsfor the money for the adventure,SO their parents gave then some money .Then they bought some food to eat and then they went to a boat to exploreplaces and also to fine a best islands for the picnic.
After finding a island they found a beautiful island little bite far from them but they went their through the boat .Their they parked their boat and went into the island their they fastly gather some wooden sticks because their was less time for the night .Then after gathering the woods they made a bonfire .
After making the bonfire they assembled their camp.T hen after assembling the camp. It was night and they were hungry So they made their food and they ate it.THen they went to the camp to sleep.On they morning they made their breakfast and then they went to explore the forest.
when they went much deeper in the forest they found something that was shining like the gold when they went near to it .There was a much precious stone inside the land .They bring it out and them when they went to the place where they parked their boat .Then when they reach their the saw that our boat is missing.After seeing that they were very scared.
So they spend some days in the island .As they were eating the food like fishes.Then on the third day their parentscame there and took them to the house because it was much lateand the friends wasn't came to their houses so their parents decidedto came there .Then when they went to the village they saw the precious stone then the parents was much happy .Then they sold the precious stone and they both friends has they completedtheir studies so then they Started a big business with the partnership.Then they also made big companies to increase the employment rate and also to earn more profit to make different schools ,hospitals and markets in the villages where the school and the hospitals will be charging many low rates and also the market rent will also be much cheaper, in this case, he could help the villagers.
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Thats all I hope that you all like my story .I am inviting @ahsansharif, @bahrol, and @saintkelvin17 and @muhammad-ahmad to visit my post .
A very wonderful story but next tike be conscious of the use of then, you used excessively in this post.
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Hi dear, I notice that in your stories there's always an end where good is done for the entire village. How filthy rich can one be to make that happen. I wonder if al the villagers would respond in the same way since I learned two things in life:
Your story is a bit chaotic and I had a hard time with the first sentence. Try to pay a bit of attention to it since this is the first thing everyone reads.
you also mixed they where it should be the
Example: the apple, the boy, the children, the food, the car
We are busy, they are sleeping.
I wish you a great Saturday and thanks for writing with us.
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Thanks for your great words and remarks.
Also for visiting my post.
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