Not a problem. As I said, I enjoy reading your poems and this one really has some powerful imagery so I was just adding my two cents in helping you possibly get the most out of it you can. I will also point out that most poems I write are never complete the first time I write them. I find it's usually best to let them stew for a few days and then go back to them. Usually when I do that I find lines that aren't quite "right" or words that don't quite fit and I can re-work them into something better. That would be my advice for you here. I think this has the makings of a really great poem and with some more work you could smooth out a few of the rough edges and truly make it epic. Keep up the great work!
PS. As for the other contest....you realize you'll now have to split the prize with me if you win, right? Since I pointed you to it.... lol
I have been working on this one for quite a while, but I did really want to get it to a point I could enter it in this contest! Damn the temptation of a deadline lol, but thank you, because I will put this back in the return to pile and give it another look at in a week or two. I did cut two verses, rewrite a few and add one, so there is a good bit I can play around with it still.
Hmm I think you may be backing the wrong pony for that one lol! Then again, I am really struggling to tell if it is finished. I could do with a critical eye to look over it and suggest a few tweaks if I am gonna stand a chance, for a cut of course...
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