Kill the Pad Challenge #5- Family

in killthepad •  7 years ago  (edited)

This is my entry for the "KILL THE PAD" CHALLENGE WEEK #5 - SPONSORED BY SMA ( This is a DSound Community Initiative ), hosted by @jamesgetsit.

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It is crazy, how we randomly showed up together as family.
Of all the humans; of all the chances,
We are here together choreographing dances.
We share resources, land and provisions.
We influence our personalities; moralities; decisions.
We can lift each other up when we see each other falling.
Butting heads along the way but in the end, we are calling,
On each other cause we’re family
No one else cares enough to save me.
I don’t need the world when it’s rainy
Cause the ones I love make life gravy.
I couldn’t plan this anymore perfectly,
The ones I have as family fit in my world so artfully.
As if I’m crafted as the legacy to be the person I claim to be.
I could never be this person, filled with eccentric personification.
In fact my life could have been worsened; filled with eternal damnation.
Had I not been born among the few who continue to be faithful.
I’m cannot live life all by myself; I simply am not able.
I need my family, and those who are true to this identity.
To face the rest of the life; and to achieve my destiny.



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Aint nobody doing it like simgirl
Spiting rhymes for the world
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That's why I'm gathering up Steem, so I can share the wealth. Know what I mean?? Thank you for reading and for leaving this greeting.

You the one bringing the gravy now!! @simgirl kickin in the real-world :)

I'm learning!! Thanks for checking it out.

Really dope... You are really getting a solid grasp on bar structure and it shows... I'd say the first half of the verse flowed sooooo smooth in comparison to the second half.

The second half seemed a bit stretched, you were trying to fit too much into the structure.. This wouldn't have been as obvious if the whole verse was longer bars like that, but because the first half just flowed so effortlessly it made the second half feel very clunky.

Really dope content though and so glad you were able to participate this week!

Thank you for the feedback and for allowing me to enter late! I'll be on the watch this week, can't afford to lose those leader board points!!!