Write in micro size 03 | SLC S21W03

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Hello everyone, Microwriters

Welcome to the third week of our microfiction writing workshop.
Write in micro size

TELEGRAPHIC LANGUAGE AND MICROFICTION.
#microwrite03

WHAT'S NEW:

Follow the hashtag of the week: #microwrite03
Take the assessment for Week 2. Go to Feedback from Week 2
Custom assignments: Some will receive special assignments tailored to their skills, optional.
Recognition of your work: The best works of the week will be highlighted.
Constructive comments: Share your opinions on your classmates' work, suggest creative ideas and improvements.
Focus on writing: Use only one image per post to highlight your writing.
What will we do in Week 3? |- Three tasks | - Only two posts | - Commenting assertively and with empathy.|

Let's get started

Objective: Use the essential words for the story.

What does condensing mean? -- Access the theory lessons: -- 1-- 2

This week we will focus on two crucial processes for short writing:

Condensing a story
Using concise and direct language.

Condensing is: getting the essential part of a story by adapting it to a few words. Preserving the essence of the longer story that inspired it.

Conciseness is: The ability to communicate using the minimum number of words necessary to express the essential part of the message.

TASKS

Task 1: First condensation. National Geographic magazine wants to publish your story in a special edition. But a problem arises. You receive a telegram
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URGENT From: National Geographic Magazine To: Dear Microwriter. We regret to inform you that we cannot publish your microstory in 150 words. We ask you to edit it and reduce it to 50-100 words including title. Send it to our offices before wednesday, november 13. We will pay the three points agreed upon. We sorry for the inconvenience. We look forward to having you as a contributor. We await your submission. National Geographic.

Task 1: First condensation.
National Geographic magazine wants to publish your story in a special edition. But a problem arises. You receive a telegram

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URGENT

From: National Geographic Magazine

To: Dear Microwriter.

We regret to inform you that we cannot publish your microstory in 150 words. We ask you to edit it and reduce it to 50-100 words including title.
Send it to our offices before wednesday, november 13. We will pay the three points agreed upon.
We sorry for the inconvenience. We look forward to having you as a contributor. We await your submission.

National Geographic.

Instructions

Revise: Find your first micro-story for this course (Week 1). Read through the comments and corrections you've received.
Improve your story, enhance it, give it an unexpected twist. Change the ending, the narrator's point of view.
Condense it: Keep it to 100 words or less. Reduce your story to the essentials, keeping only the most impactful elements.
Choose a title that captures the essence of your new version.
Get inspired: Look at the examples provided.
-1- --- -2-
Use only one image for the cover.
Post on your blog or in a community, both in your native language and in English.
Title the post: First condensation
Tag @joslud and @solperez.
Use the hashtags: #microwrite03 #story #shortstory #creativewriting #steemexclusive #country
Note: If it's your first week: We'll assign you a story to start exploring.

😂🤣😁Task 2: Funny Telegram😁🤣😂

Instructions

Learn: Research how telegrams were written.
Create: Write a funny story in 60 words or less, just like a telegram.
Be concise: Get to the point, no beating around the bush. Surprise us with a funny ending.
Reflect: Tell how you felt writing in this old-fashioned message format.
Save your telegram to post along with task 3.
Remember: Telegrams were short, concise, and direct messages, so: let your imagination run wild and create a funny story in just a few words.

Task 3: Turn a poem into a direct and concise narrative

Read carefully: Analyze the poem and the example micro-story, paying special attention to the title: "Fire in your gaze."

Fuego en tu Mirada.

Sentía tu respiración.
Percibía tu olor.
De mi cuerpo emanaba sudor.
Se adueñó de mí un fuerte calor.

Quería hablar y no podía.
Me movía lentamente.
Respiraba fuertemente.
No diferenciaba entre sueño o realidad; tu presencia me aturdía.

El fuego de tu mirada, ese que me encantaba, ya no está.
¡Se fue…!
La cama está vacía.
Aunque el calor de tu cuerpo permanece en ella.
El olor que dejaste en la almohada me acompaña cada noche.
Tu amor me hizo bien, tus mentiras me dañaron.
¡Ahora es ella quien disfruta de un placer desenfrenado!!

Autora: @aleisbertblanco

Fire in your gaze.

I felt your breath.
I perceived your smell.
Sweat emanated from my body.
A strong heat took over me.

I wanted to speak and I couldn't.
I moved slowly.
I breathed heavily.
I couldn't differentiate between dream or reality; your presence stunned me.

The fire in your gaze, the one that I loved, is no longer there.
It's gone...!
The bed is empty.
Although the heat of your body remains in it.
The smell you left on the pillow accompanies me every night.
Your love did me good, your lies hurt me.
Now it's she who enjoys unbridled pleasure!!

Author: @aleisbertblanco

Condensation by @joslud

Alerta de Incendio

La chispa en tus ojos me encendía en deseo, tu olor me embriagaba. Aunque el calor de tu cuerpo sigue en ella, nuestra cama está vacía, se siente sola sin ti. De tanto verla se volvió cenizas. Voy a entregártelas hoy. Llevo el fuego en mi mirada.

Fire Alert

The spark in your eyes ignited my desire, your scent intoxicated me. Even though the warmth of your body is still in it, our bed is empty, it feels lonely without you. From looking at it so much it turned to ashes. I'm going to give them to you today. I carry the fire in my gaze.

Instructions:

Condense it: Create a micro-story (maximum 60 words) based on the poem, keeping the idea of fire in your gaze.
Create a title for the micro-story.
Use phrases or verses from the poem to bring your story to life. Be creative
Conciseness: Get straight to the point, without beating around the bush. Surprise us with an unexpected ending.
Reflect: Write about how you felt when you transformed a poem into such a short story.
Publish it on your personal blog or from any community, in your language and with an English translation.english.
Title of the post: Of Humor and Love
Join your telegram (task 2) and your new micro-story in a single post.
Visit and comment on at least six posts from your peers, with suggestions that invite you to improve their stories, for example: ways to make some parts of their micro-stories more concise or direct
Post at least six links to the comments you make to your peers.
A single image on the cover.
Tag: @joslud and @solperez.
Hashtags: #microwrite03 #story #shortstory #creativewriting #steemexclusive #country

Remember The idea is to have fun, learning and improving our microstories #microwrite03

Evaluation rubrics: Total 10 points. Task 1: 3 points Task 2: 2 points. Task 3: 3 points Comment: 1,5 pt. Assement W02: 0,5 point

Task 1. Checklist

Legend: TOTAL task 1: 3 pts

Definitely (0.2 pt) --- Pretty close (0.1 to 0.19 pts) --- Improvement. (0.001 to 0.09pts)

CONCISENESS: 1 pt

a. The micro-story fits within the established word limit. Includes the Title. (0.2 pts)
b. Short Title (less than 6 words) (0.2 pts)
c. All sentences are concise and direct, avoiding redundancies. (0.2 pts)
d. Each sentence or phrase provides essential information to the story. (0.2 pts)
e. Excellent spelling and grammar throughout the writing. (0.2 pts)

RESPECT FOR THE LEGEND, TELEGRAM OR POEM THAT INSPIRES THEM. 0.6 pts

f. The legend, humor, poem is easily recognized. (0.2 pts)
g. Maintains the essence of the legend, humor, poem, original genre. (0.2 pts)
h. Transmits the message or emotion related to the legend-humor-poem, (0.2 pts)

CREATIVITY: 0.8 pt

i. The title draws attention, making you want to know more. (0.2 pts)
j. Proposes a shocking, unexpected ending or an original perspective. (0.2 pts)
k. The ending leaves a lasting impression on the reader. (0.2 pts)
l. Demonstrates originality in the use of language, form and structure of the story. (0.2 pts)

REFLECTION 0.6 pts

m. Goes beyond what is requested, includes analysis of your creative process. (0.2 pts)
n. Strong reflections that clarify your learning. (0.2 pts)
o. Your reflection adds value to the story. (0.2 pts)

Checklist for tasks 2 and 3 will be the same

COMMENTS 1.5

a. Use the hashtag #microwrite03 and mention the teaching team in all comments (0.25 pts)
b. Post at least four links to the comments you make to your classmates. (0.5 pts)
c. Show respect in all your interactions. Know how to validate the use of concise language. (0.5 pts)
d. Offer constructive and useful suggestions. (0.25 pts)

Fuentes

Thanks to @aleisbertblanco for providing his poem for a practical exercise.
- Poem Fuego en tu mirada

Corrector ortográfico recomendado: https://languagetool.org/es

Original production by @joslud

I'll wait for you in the next publication.

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inspiracion (81) · 8 days ago

Excelente semana 3, tenemos diferentes tareas para explorar, mejorar y ser creativos.

Tengo una duda, en la tarea 3, dice dos veces acerca de publicar, primero dice: Publícalo en tu blog personal o desde cualquier comunidad, en tu idioma y con traducción al inglés. Y luego dice: Une tu telegram (tarea 2) y tu nuevo microrrelato en un solo post.

¿Entonces son 3 publicaciones, o 2? Perdona la pregunta.🙈

Gracias de antemano 🤗💗

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joslud (71) · 8 days ago

Hola, @inspiracion

Gracias por la atención 🙏. A ver, voy a colocarlo así:

Post tasks 2 and 3 together in one post. On your personal blog or any community. In your native language and translated into English.

Publica las tareas 2 y 3 juntas en una sola publicación. En tu blog personal o cualquier comunidad. En tu idioma materno y traducción al inglés.

Cualquier otros detalle comunícalo por favor.

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inspiracion (81) · 8 days ago

Oh, muchas gracias por la pronta respuesta, entendido 😊

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joslud (71) · 8 days ago

Ser creativamente concisos... Desde aquí empezamos a meternos en las profundidades del tema.

Gracias por comentar.

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joslud (71) · 6 days ago

@aplausos @nishadi89 @blessedlife @genomil @luisito01 @norat23 @dove11 @goodybest @sharifanamin

ATTENTION
New participants

Instructions for task 1

As a story to condense, for task 1 #microwrite03. We ask you to use: ""THE LETTER YOU WROTE FOR THE ANT""

Your job is to:

Turn the letter into an action story.
Less than 100 words.
Follow the general instructions for this task: condense into concise language.
Be creative.

If you have any questions or doubts, we are at your service.

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goodybest (78) · 6 days ago

Got it! Thank you for the information. I will submit my entry within the week.

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ifatniza (69) · 6 days ago

halo Sir lecturer @joslud, is it necessary to condense the story from the first week? Can I replace it with a new story?

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joslud (71) · 6 days ago

Halo @ifatniza

Yes, I would like you to work on Timun Mas's legend. Condensate its history will help us practice concise and creative writing. Timun Mas is a very interesting character with which we can create many stories.

If you have any reason not to want to do this task, you can explain to me. Tell me two reasons and we will consider them together.