New Steemit Writing Challenge!

in newsteemitchallenge •  7 years ago  (edited)

This is an entry for @whitewarlike 's New Steemit Writing Challenge! Hope you enjoy!


“Friends and family, we are gathered here today to celebrate the life of...” the minister continued solemnly, his voice barely a whisper to the small boy standing far behind the fence of the cemetery.

One by one, people came in droves to place white sheets of paper into a 6 foot rectangular grave. This wasn't an actual grave – just a representation of the one where Dreemsteem had been buried 6 months prior to this event.

Driving along the road leading up to her mountain home, Dreemsteem had plummeted to her death after her brakes had failed.


“Papa, how come they're all puttin' papers into that hole?” the little boy asked, as he raised his arms so his Papa could lift him high enough to see more easily.

Papa bent down and wiped his leaking eyes with the back of his hand. Lifting the boy into his arms, he snuggled him close and sniffed the sweet smell of jasmine in his hair. It brought back a faint memory of the perfume that Dreemsteem had worn at the conference last year. Had it not been for her.... he shuddered to think of what might have been their future.

“How come we can't go closer, Papa? I wanna see that hole too,” the boy struggled to get comfortable in Papa's arms, as he was getting much too big to be held by Papa.

“Look at all these people. They need to put their pages in the hole. We're giving them the opportunity to go first. If there's still daylight after they're finished, I'll take you to see the hole. Now, stop squirming. Eat your dreemyberry,” Papa chided the boy as he fished four purple berries out of a small bag and popped them into the child's mouth.

The berries were similar to raspberries, but sweeter. The boy eagerly devoured all four berries and hoped that there were more in the small paper bag.

"Dreemyberry" ~ Source

“Mmmm, I love dreemyberries,” the child licked each finger, before sticking his hand into the bag. “Can I have some more?”

“No,” Papa smiled in response to the boy's eager search. “You can have four more tomorrow.”

“Four, four. Always four. No more. Go to the store!” the boy giggled at his rhyming pattern.

Papa set his grandchild back down to the ground and wiggled his finger in the little face, teasingly.

“Only four. These came at a high price, and we need to honor the gift that they are.”

“How much did they cost, Papa? I have money. I can buy us some more.”

“No, my love. They cost that lady up there.... her life.” Papa paused and looked away to the darkening sky. “She knew that they'd be after her. And they did get her in the end. But tricks on them, because after her death – all her research was released to all the media, lawyers galore, doctors, hospitals, patients, as many people as you see here – and many more.”

“What's that mean Papa? How did she pay for dreemyberries with her life??”

“Nevermind, child. You'll know one day.”

Papa and grandson waited patiently for each person to drop their paper into the grave.

Hours later, Papa roused the sleeping child in his arms. “Look. Momma is putting her papers in.”

A slender dark-haired woman walked up to the grave, stood silently for a moment and placed two papers among the thousands of others. She slowly made her way back through the crowd of people still waiting, and eventually reached the side of her father.

Papa looked down at the child. “Do you still want to wait for all the people so you can see the grave with the papers?”

Rubbing his eyes, the little boy shook his head 'no'. “That's ok. Momma can just tell me what the paper said. She put one in for me and one in for her. Right, Momma? What did our papers say?”

Momma took the child from her father's arms and squeezed him gently to her chest, feeling the warmth of his healthy little body.

She put her face close to his ear and whispered.

“Cancer: Full Remission.”

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Nicely written @dreemsteem. I was surprised at the end and got a wee lump in my throat. The papers reminded me of this verse

canceling the record of debt that stood against us with its legal demands. This he set aside, nailing it to the cross. Col 2:14

I've personally received that writ from my doctor recently. Cancer: Full Remission

ohhhhhhhhhhhh ..... well that just brought tears! :) congratulaions! I'm celebrating with you!!!
and Col 2:14 that's a good one... paid in full :)

something about cancer.... it just connects us all and grieves us all. is there anyone that hasn't been touched by it in some form???

when i was reading it to my husband - i started crying near the end. i didn't mean to - sometimes when I re-read what i've written - it hits me like a new reader just reading it. odd!

thank you for the compliment my friend!!!

When you write from your heart that's what happens. When you write from your head it lacks life and emotion. I think this is why you started crying as you read to your husband.

Time for bed for me. Have a good sleep...sweet dreems. :)

yeah :) well I'll remember that when i'm doubting why i write at all hehehehe

night sweet friend! sweet dreems indeed hehehe

WOOOHOOOO!!! I celebrate this beautiful news with you dear @countrygirl!!! I too kicked cancer to the moon! NEVER GIVE UP!!
Huggins, D

Thank you so much! Good news for you as well. :)

Yes, indeed!
I wish you a wonderful weekend <3

big lump in my throat, I too am in remission!

More celebrations!!!! congratulations! I'm glad this story touched you. Wouldn't that be a beautiful thing to be remembered by??? sigh

nice post writting best of luck,.. nice story and it is great challange for our community traditions thumb up

aw thanks!!! appreciate that :)

Even though I had got the gist of what the papers were by the end, the last line still got me in the heart.

Me too.... And I was the one writing it! Lololol

Oh youuuu <3 <3 <3 <3!! This is very beautifully written! I was captured from the beginning & was wondering where will this story go..... BAMM ....you made me cry, not in a bad way, I am so touched <3
Thank you so much for sharing this brilliant story with us @dreemsteem, I hope you win <3
Much, much, much, mucher ;) love to you & loads of huggins <3

I miss you!!!!! :) but we will find our time again - hehehehe vacation is so close - i'm ready!!! (but so many things to do before i leave! LOL)
i almost wish that i had waited to start the hunt -until after returning from vacation. I feel like i'm leaving my little baby project behind. but i have lots of people who are helping - so i just need to trust and relax and enjoy the time with my family! :)

and if i win the contest or not..... all the comments i've read on this post - all the celebrations with people who have BEAT cancer, and mourning with the ones who have lost someone to cancer.... the connection - that's what matters. i already won :)

I am baaaack!! I missed you too though, loooaads!
I wish you a extraordinary superb vacation sweets <3 Don't worry so much, it will all work out <3

THANK YOU FOR BEING YOU <3 Huggins <3

That was fantastic!! I'm resteeming! ❤

Thank you!!!! it's fun to write about detoxing and laughing at my crazy husband heheheh. and its a GREAT pleasure to get the community involved and supporting one another on the Hunt!!! :)

but there is nothing like returning to my first love of writing for the pleasure of dreeeeeeming how things could be. Nothing is beyond your imagination as a writer. It's the closest thing to creating worlds as I can ever come to on this earth ;)

I'm so honored that you enjoyed it enough to resteem. I read it a few times myself and the end still gets me.

Yes! Creating feels magical!

look at your cute new profile pic hehehehe

Haha thank you!

Cancer is everywhere isn't it - It was really lovely to read down your comment and find 2 people in remission - that's just awesome :) Lovely writing and so touching :)

it really was...celebrations??? that was the icing on the cake!!! :)

So, you got no response from me earlier simply because I needed to read and re-read this and give it the attention it deserved.

I've re-steemed it, but will not vote until my VP comes back up (sometime tomorrow?) ;)

Well done.

😄😇😄

@creatr

P.S. You may want to add a #conspiracy tag. Big pharma has been murdering many dozens of holistic doctors...

Thank you @creatr!!!! I saw your resteem and it brought a big smile to my face. I know you are very selective in your resteems - so - that means the world to me :)

and i will add that tag right now!

its a great writing...

thank you so much @riyad11 :)