Steemit Open Mic Week 97 - (original song) - Things As They Ought To BesteemCreated with Sketch.

in openmic •  6 years ago  (edited)

I hope you enjoy this original song. Maybe you can relate to it.

Lyrics
Don't live your life for me
Don't live your life for me
I'm not responsible
So irresponsible

Don't call me anymore
Don't send me poetry
Is it something that you still don't know
Don't you think it's time we let it go

Don't send me photographs
With writing on the backs
They're manufactured memories
And don't you know, I am not worthy

I tried to tell the truth
The truth as I saw it
And if you're wondering
None of this was your fault
I tried to tell the truth
But I found it was no use
Cuz you only want to see
Things as they ought to be

Big thanks to @luzcypher

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It's incredible how many things are coming in my mind while listening such a relaxing and beautiful song. It touches my heart and I like it!
Awesome lyrics too! :)

Thank you, Gabriela. There is no greater compliment to a songwriter.

I followed you.

Rock on! You just got featured in our Original Sunday curation post!

Thank you.

Hi johnthefelon,

This post has been upvoted by the Curie community curation project and associated vote trail as exceptional content (human curated and reviewed). Have a great day :)

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Thank you, @curie. Your recognition is something I always try to earn.

Awesome song John- I aspire to be able to play like that one day! Really enjoyed your performance- and congratulations on Curie vote- so well deserved! E x

Thank you, @eveningart, and congratulations on your own Curie upvote. I will read your first chapter for sure. I am a writer myself.

How long have you been playing the guitar?

My poetry comes out of me.
The more you resist it the more I see
how rhymes and verse can be
just what I need to get free.

From your egotistical embrace
your original song is just a case
of you always needing your space
without regard to my needs or taste.

I'm sorry if I dare to dream
of the butter and the cream
while you're off posting your life on steem
its always you, know what I mean?

To myself I must be true,
you want to go, that makes me blue
but let me tell you what Imma do
I'm getting over loving you.

That was beautiful.

Your original song inspired that! Thank you for posting on steem, and keep it up!

  ·  6 years ago (edited)

Hi johnthefelon.
I love the art of misc.
But this time am having a pain with the lyrics.
It sounds a push away.
This part should be turned to am worthy.
"And don't you know, I am not worthy."
And a few parts would follow the direction.
Good luck in the contest.

Thank you for the feedback. In the song, the narrator is trying to get out of a relationship, but the other person is hanging on. They live apart, and she keeps sending him things to keep him in her life ("manufactured memories"), and he is saying "I am not worthy," as in, she should share these precious things with someone who will appreciate her love. The song is gender-neutral and could easily be a woman singing to a man.

Glad you liked it. I followed you.

Wow.

You rock, my brother !!!!

Excellent original song, I liked your tone of voice, very folk, incredible and congratulations for your participation this week.

Thank you, Fabian. That means a lot. I just followed you.

Nice one, John!
Are you really a felon? hahaha. :-)
Great song, man!

Thanks, man. I've been handcuffed and tossed in the back of a police car a couple times, but I don't have a record. My handle comes from a two-man musical comedy troupe I started. We needed a name, and my buddy, Joe, came to rehearsal and said, "Felon Fiercely. What do you think?" I said, "I like it. I'll be John Felon and you'll be Joe Fiercely." And those were our stage names from then on.

Cool story, man! hahaha...