Open Mic Songwriters Challenge Week 1 + Open Mic Week 61 (lucybanks original)

in openmic •  7 years ago 

Hey guys,

I am upkeeping my usual weekly post to open mic week this week but also combining it with the new competition #songwriterschallenge - @meno + @luzcypher!

This week for the songwriter's challenge, the theme was Broken Mirrors... so here is my creation, it is 100% original.

I hope you enjoy!

Walking past the reflection
In the water on the floor
Nothing but dirty footprints
And a face you can’t ignore

Silenced by an image
Of somebody staring back
Pent up deranged feelings
And the fear one might attack

Broken mirror
Shattered into tiny pieces lying on the ground
Broken mirror
Someone lurking in the shadows, not to make a sound

Lying in your bed at night
Safe with a shut door
But you hear it open
Like somebody wants some more

And you hear the laughter
Like a cackle in the air
You tuck yourself right under
Now you know that nothings there

Broken mirror
Left with an illusion that you just can’t understand
Broken mirror
Somethings changed within you, it wasn’t what you planned

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wow sweet and beautiful song mam..

Thank you @g10a! I need to check yours out!

sure mam I truly appreciate it..

You're fantastic.
I love your song. You have an amazing voice!
Thank you so much for sharing that.

Ah thank you @rezoanulvibes, a lovely thing for you to say!

A lot of feeling in your voice for a beautiful song

Thank you very much @muphy :) a lot of heart went into it!

Nice one. Your voice is always so lovely! peace

Thank you @onetruebrother!

i love it! congrats

Thank you @hugo.exe :D

Awesome entry, Lucy!

Great job Lucy. Sounds really good.

Thanks @luzcypher! x

Great song, and I love your voice!

Thank you @ausxen, very kind of you!

Very nice song. Great vocals, lyrics, and chord progression.

Ah thank you @lk666! I'm glad you like my chord progression! I was running late for the deadline so had to come up with something quickly and was hoping it would sound nice :D

Mission accomplished ;)

Love it! Great job as always, Lucy!

Thanks man!

wow yeah! You really went to a dark place with this concept! great writing, and I know everyones already said it, but I'll say it again, you have a lovely voice! x

Haha I did a bit! I don't know why but I find it easier to write slightly darker lyrics even though I'm one of the happiest people I know :/ maybe I have underlying issues haha. Thank you!

hehe. I know the feeling..... I guess its that classic thing, if you use your creativity to purge your negativity then its like therapy I guess....its probably why you stay happy!

@lucybanks Has anyone ever said you sound like Adele?

I'll bet you could blow 'Hello' out of the water.

Ironically, your cover post looks a tad bit like her.

Best regards!

Peace.

Ah thanks!
What a compliment!!
Maybe I'll have a go at singing hello

Maybe I'll have a go at singing hello

That would be great! Btw, are you uploading your music to Dtube? I notice several people on Open-Mic are uploading their work over there for a few extra coins, and a bit more recognition.

Btw, if you choose not to sing hello for Open Mic, why not just upload a rendition for the fun of it; and, up-votes, of course! :+)

Best regards.

Peace.

I did actually start off on Dtube but it was lagging a bit for some reason. That is a good point though about it getting more recognition so I might go back to it and see if it's improved!

I may upload a cover of it just for you haha, I'll tag you in it when I've done one, just got to try and crack it first!

it was lagging a bit

I think they've made significant progress from the looks of the Open-Mic participants posting all of their compilations. I think any amount earned, especially in SP is good in the event Steem goes the way of BTC someday.

just for you haha

Awww...I won't be selfish...you, plural, Steemit family (lol).

Best regards!

Peace.

I had no idea you entered songwriter challenge!! Lucy!! that was AMAZING!! I love your sound! i swear to God that if you come up with an album or EP i would totally buy it! ♥ Upvoted!

Ah haha thank you @soykatonline!! Thats a lovely thing to say! Well I will keep checking yours out each week, your song was very nice last week!

haha thanks! i am happy you liked it!

and yeah.. you should definitely do at least an EP.

i don't have much voting power right now... but once i do i will give you a bigger upvote....lol!
sorry about that... by the way... (well i am not sure how old you are, but maybe you will know this if i ask) ... did you ever see an MTV show called.. "Instant Star"? your sound reminds me of the main character's music.. i was obsessed with with her growing up! .. look her up.. specially the song " skin" i think you will like it.

Haha I've not seen it but I might just have to have a look!!

yeah, check her song "skin" it is my favorite one... and also the one that has kind of the same style as this one :)

  ·  7 years ago (edited)

Very good entry @lucybanks. Please stay humble just the way you are. You have a lot of talent and can create good original material under time pressure. I too was thinking of this song concept with broken mirrors and take it into a dark twisting direction. I wasn't planning on entering the song competition but I still like to write songs to see what would happen but mine would be much darker than what you have shared here lol If I make it I'll share it and see what you and others think. What @basilmarples stated is true. Sometimes releasing negativity through creativity can purge and cleanse the mind of such inner turmoil subconsciously. I liked the way you approached this one, and the chord progressions are spot on.

Ah thank you @verbal-d, yeah I very much like that thought that I'd be cleansing the mind so I might just stick to it. I just find sad chord progressions so much more beautiful. Ive never been a huge fan of happy clappy pop music so this is far more my calling. Please do share your song with me, I'd love to be able to comment and see what you can do!

  ·  7 years ago (edited)

You're very welcome. You certainly can sing, that's without a doubt! I also find beauty in the sadness of darker more impacting chord progressions. They speak to the soul and allow our emotions to be easily expressed. So You almost hit my top 5 this week, I am sure you will do so in the near future. But you're still on my list regardless, read the full review here.

https://steemit.com/openmic/@verbal-d/steemit-s-official-open-mic-judge-verbal-d-s-top-5-entries-for-week-61-original-blog

Also, I sent you a song before but maybe you missed the comment?
Please check out these two original songs of mine for me, I would love to hear your feedback. I sing and rap on both tracks.

The Official Bitcoin Song
The Official Steemit Song

Yeah they're just a lot more beautiful to listen to for me, can't stay away from it. But I'm glad you agree. I always think that people might find my songs depressing because of it!
Ahh thank you love, very close! Hopefully I'll get even closer next time :D
Sorry I missed them, I'll check them out for you and let you know what I think!

I have written some pretty depressing poems but have turned a few into songs as well. They do have a rare beauty unseen and under appreciated by many. And again, you're very welcome.

I'm really happy you enjoyed the Bitcoin Song, now wait until you hear the Steemit Song :)

Wow. I wish I could write songs this well on command. Your lyrics are great and your voice is so strong. <3 <3 <3 I really love it.

Ah such a kind thing to say @abyni!
I'm sure you could if you put your mind to it!!

Stunning song! And I love the fact that you have your cupboard doors open! It's like you are saying "look it's all about the song people not some fancy background" :P

Well done!

Amazing voice and lyrics that remind me of Morrissey or Jeff Buckley.
Keep it up!