Thanks @meno @luzcypher and all of the judges and supporters of musicians on Steemit !
Also thanks for letting us enter our songwriters challenge songs to the openmic!
Okay this is way outside of the usual way that I write songs. As I have mentioned before I never try to write on a subject; these things either "download" through me or not...
I decided to forgo any oblique references and go straight to the title.
I found out the hardest part other than writing a song on demand, in one day, is trying to record it! I kept messing up the lyrics but after many many takes I settled with this....thanks for listening and be gentle ! (PS-This song is not autobiographical)
peace
In the night
Seeking light
While you struggle
With reflections
In your mind
Wandering far
From where you are
And you suffer
All the darkness
In your heart
Broken mirror
Nothing's clear
As you try
To recognize
Scattered pieces
On the floor
Broken mirror
It's so clear
Though you try
You can't hide
Many faces
On the wall
Passing by
You flash a smile
You're not showing
What is going
On inside
Don't know why
You live the lie
Never seeing
Your own being
In their eyes
Chorus
Love it! As usual ;)
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Thank you
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Anytime!
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I love that sound sir.
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Thanks, and I saw your entry; you have a lovely voice. Much respect for taking on the challenge my friend!
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Quite nice, brother!
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Right on bro
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What an amazing song you wrote there! I really like the part with trying to hide from the faces on the wall. I also felt a little like in school at the beginning to write on a certain topic, but then I got inspired and i thought: this is finally the school I wanna be part of. With everything that comes out of ourselves we are learning something new.
And I totally agree on that the hardest part is recording it some hours after writing. I didn't have the patience to get to take 500 so I just left the mistakes in.
I really enjoyed that, thanks for sharing.
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If I manage to write one for the next challenge I am shooting for less than 499 takes...peace
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it was a real great lyrics and deep meaning, perfect performance with your great voice on it, I really enjoyed!!
peace brother!!
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Thanks man
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Love it! Great lyrics, vocals and guitar. I literally laughed out loud at the end when you said, “this is take five hundred”. hahah I know how that feels!
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Hey there and thank you...one reason that I have not done much recording of my songs in the past is that trying to be the engineer and artist at the same time kills it for me. This openmic format is perfect because I just try to get one decent take and let it be...
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That's pretty amazing that the open mic community has opened the door for you to start recording more of your music! I have felt a similar freedom with open mic as well. I just do covers (I'm not a songwriter), but a year ago I would have never guessed that I'd be recording myself and posting it online!
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I had to listen to that a couple times it was so good. What open tuning is that?
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Thanks man, actually standard tuning but I always tune my guitars down two steps. So you start with a D on the first string instead of an E. Also I think what makes it sound different is when I play that second chord it is not a regular "G" because I am fretting the 1st and 2nd strings both on the 3rd fret, instead of the top string on the 3rd an 2nd string on the 2nd which gives it a different vibe...hope that makes sense ! Peace
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broken mirror
just love it
@thank's for sharing
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Thank you
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Most excellent words to this song here, very inspiring and I quite thoroughly enjoyed it. Peace love and be well bro. @onetruebrother
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Many thanks it is always very mysterious to me how it all happens...often if I go back weeks or months later I can't even remember writing something...love to you as well
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Man, you blew my mind with this song!
After a few seconds of hearing it, I couldn’t help grabbing my Cajom, and playing with you. It grooves! I must have been playing it in a loop a half dozen times. I went to listen to the other songs on your account, some are really top. Yet, this one is for me the most amazing.
I‘d like to try something if you are willing: I will send you a private message on your youtube channel with an email address. Could you send me the video and the audio file (use wetransfer.com for these large files, it’s free).
I would like to add cajom and bass (played live on your song), and I will embed the audio and video recordings on your video. It's for the fun of it.
Anyway, well done, this song deserves to win!
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I didn't save a separate audio file...but i think any video editor should allow you to separate the video from audio? The file is on the way; looks like it may take a while. Thank you for your kind words.peace
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Hello, I got the file, thank you. I will be playing around with it with Cajom & bass. If anything good comes out of it, I'll let you know :-).
Peace with you too and stay inspired.
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Great song! Happy to have heard this, looking forward to your next posts ✌🏼👍🏻
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Thanks!
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I think you were allowed to use the same entry for both competitions.. you didn't need to upload it twice.. but hey! good to be back here listening to this great song... i still think is the best one i heard from you... ;)
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You're awesome @onetruebrother. Pure talent. Sound like a mixture between folk and rock, two of my favourite genres. Great job! You've gained yourself a fan
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You are very kind. I'll be watching for your performances as well! peace
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That was heat. Nice job man! I’m sure I’m not the only one who would love a quick how to video on exactly how to play that!
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Uploaded a video for you https://steemit.com/openmic/@onetruebrother/how-to-play-broken-mirror-guitar-tutorial... thanks for asking peace
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That was rather cool! It has that classic folk rock vibe to it. Makes me think of something Crosby, Stills, and Nash would do.
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Nice music and lyrics, i'll follow you, i love the harmonic progression, and your voice remaind me of Maynard James Keenan from tool.
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