Destiny
Life like the wavy waters
The human soul is destined to be the controller of the canoe under a storm
Man can't alone to sail through it
It takes a person to balance the power
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A selfish self
Sinks in a storm
Good self will be blessed to sail through the storm
If that does not work
Life will still be worth it
Life will not be in vain
NOTE
This poem is submitted for The Writers’ Block Poetry Contest: Week #6
I'm so sorry for my bad grammar maybe. Because my native language is Indonesian language.
Your poem has a nice thought.
critique: (you can still edit your poem)
Line 3
Man can't _____ alone through it. There is a word missing. I think I know what you mean, but I'm not sure. maybe you mean "navigate"?
Line 6
sink should be sinks
Line 8
Got a blessing to_____ through the storm
there should be a word or two there. maybe "make it"?
Hope this helps.
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Thanks for your correct. Hopefully one day, my grammar will be good. It' s hard for me.
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look online for something called Grammarly. It is free. It will work as you type on steemit. It will point out your spelling and grammar and punctuation. It is an excellent way to learn.
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Thanks for your advice. I appreciate it.
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A poem full of meaning never give up in the face of conditions is sometimes not as expected there is suffering and there is grief, keep the spirit in achieving goals
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Life does always put us in the unexpected. We must be strong and wise to deal with it.
Thanks for your coming here.
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"The human soul is destined to be the controller of the canoe under a storm" This is the kinda lines that makes a man wish he'd come up with.
Beautiful stuff I expect to read more from you.
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Yeah thanks for your advice. Do you have account on Discord Channel? Maybe we send message to each other and discuss about writing in English
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Yup, AmirTheAwesome1#5402 Feel free to contact me.
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I will contact you as soon as possible 😊. Thank you very much for coming here. I'm so happy to meet a new friend on Steemit.
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You may not make many friends, but you'll defiantly make quality friends on here. I made like 5 friends here so far and they made my life great, I hope to do the same to you so Please feel free to contact me whenever you need anything and I'll do what I can.
I'll keep an eye on your work.
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Hopefully I will get it. By the way, I send the friend request. Please accept
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Each day your poetry seems to awaken my passion for your work.
Nice poetry dear. You are doing great.
Keep steeming
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Thanks, my dearest friend. Keep up writing your poetry. I will wait.
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Beautifully written..well done :)
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Thank you so much for dropping by :)
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excellent poem. I like the metaphor
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Thanks for dropping by.
Have a great day.
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