to gather, in passing [poetry // photos]

in poetry •  7 years ago 

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and when you see this brilliant turmoil, darling

with outstretched fingers

dare to approach; part the crush
extend an entreaty into the dim, and with trepidation
attempt to avoid those clinging snarls
and lingering doubts

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even though you know to try

is to become ensnared in soul in sinew
entangled, uncertain

keep pushing

when the radiance
builds to reflect the sun itself
pulling tears to the tips of your lashes;
or is it the searing trails
the thorns tear down your wrists

and when you withdraw

decorated
in lurid scratches, and gossamer robed
your hands overflowing with the light of the cosmos
and your breath ragged in exertion
anticipation, regret

each strand severed

each petal creased
each spur bloodied —
is this moment both as exquisite and as excruciating
as you never intended

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inspired by photos taken while snapping branches of fresh broom tumbling down the emerald hills of Ireland. Apparently my memories and my emotions are caught there this week. Be gentle; I dream in delicate, architectural poetry, but often express in disjointed prose.

These photos and words are all my own work, inspired by my travels all over this pretty blue marble of ours. I hope you like them. 🌶️
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imho you have really captured the essence of poetry; to talk of one thing and have it be perceived as applying to something else at a whole different level. said with passionate intensity, sensuality and abandon. disjointed prose be damned, this is hauntingly beautiful.

thank you so much. There are at least three solid facets I aimed for here, but I also think people will take whatever they need. Or, I hope, anyways. I found this way more nerve-wracking than radio.

Well-spoken 🙏🏼

I just found this.

"and when you withdraw
decorated
in lurid scratches, and gossamer robed
your hands overflowing with the light of the cosmos
and your breath ragged in exertion
anticipation, regret"

"each strand severed
each petal creased
each spur bloodied —
is this moment both as exquisite and as excruciating
as you never intended"

Sexeh!

I'll be in my bunk...

Wish I'd seen it in time to upvote it.

I didn't know you wrote poetry. I'm glad you do!

I have a few other pieces tucked away. I don't write tons on account of being a bit embarrassed to share it, but I'm hoping to keep working at it~ thank you! (and yes, there are some hella metaphors here)

❤❤❤❤ disjointed in the most beautiful way- it fits the emotion presented. Love your use of formatting to highlight specific images.

high praise from a poetry master... augh, I'm fangirling

AH. This is just lovely, Crim. Very stirring.

waghhhh, having all the writers emerge at once is overwhelming <3

LOLOLOL!!!!!

That's amazing, Crim. Beautifully written. <3

taking a stab at it~ it is my painting.

"each petal creased
each spur bloodied "...so poignant. Brava!

thank you so much. Coming away from the cliffs with an armful, I left some of myself behind quite literally, and ruined a lot of what I did collect. I think there's a beautiful lesson there.

www. when I read very fascinated myself as if my heart is stuck in the same poetry that you sing,
my life is flowering and grow so strong spirit,
do not know where it comes from

thanks, imamalkimas

You are welcome. whether you are a teacher of poetry

I hope this is just reflective art. The imagery is poignant.
My favorite poetic structure is assonance. I like the like "even though you know to try..."

I mentioned to another reader, but there are three facets to this poem that I had in mind, two of which are drawn from personal experience emotionally, and one physically (actually picking the flowers)

It's worth the risk to become entangled. We can fight or shake the madness away later.

Beautiful words @crimsonclad...can't wait to read the next.

thanks so much~ poetry is nervewracking for me, but worth it also.

I remember seeing Jack Black in an interview talking about writing something original and he said we have to keep the critics in our head at bay, that they're chirping in our ears always telling us we're not good enough - easier said than done. Probably the smartest thing I ever heard him say!

Very clever use of the spider webs in the pictures to enhance the "ensnared" in the Poetry. Inspiring poetry - is this developed from personal experiences?

I did put it out there... there are three facets to this poem that I had in mind. Two are drawn from personal experience emotionally, and one physically actually picking the flowers.

Beautiful! You should post poetry more often :)

I'll try to keep up my brave streak~ :|

This is really, really good!

I'll take your word for it, but appreciate you saying so all the same~

HOT.
You are an intense power.

so, you definitely picked up on at least one of the facets I mentioned above~
I sputter something out now and again <3

Rather unusual, but very interesting how you build this flow of words into a group of mind pictures. I like it!

rather unusual about sums us up :D Trying to gather any mind pictures at all to put out here is usually an exercise in agony because I just don't know wtf. This took more time than one of my giant wordy mish mashes.

Whoa Crimmy! Smoking poem babe 😉

thank you! I'm branching out :D

Ohhh crimmi I had no idea, because it did not say anything like this on the manual I got, that you could write like this... I take everything bad I ever said about you nughating....

<3

wait a second, who is handing out unauthorized, unofficial crimsonclad ™ merch? And making me sound like I'm anti-nug?
I'M FEELING LITIGIOUS

i dont want to clay names, but there might have been someclay who said certain things..

Well that was absolutely beautiful.

thank you for validating that I don't need to rhyme
exhales slowly

Beautiful words Crimmy, well done. Write moar!

thank you muxxy~ I am working on it, I swear.

What a pleasant surprise! 🙌 I love that even the imagery is all you own. Got me with the one two combo! Paints a vivid cognitive experience 💛💛💛

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Hello, greetings from Colombia, I'm following you and giving like, I would like to see me and support me, thank you

Hey! thanks for commenting, but I will warn you, this is not a good route to go. Asking for votes and follows tends to really turn people off, and could catch you a flag. You don't have to vote or follow someone to bring value to their posts! Comment thoughtfully on things that you like, talk about your genuine opinions, and find posts that are either in your niche or that interest you... and you'll find people you connect with who will become your audience AND your entertainment.

What a sensitive comment!

You're good people =)

I don't want to see people get flagged into oblivion... this isn't super spammy, just ineffective. If we can help teach, why not?

"even though you know to try
is to become ensnared in soul in sinew
entangled, uncertain

keep pushing
when the radiance
builds to reflect the sun itself
pulling tears to the tips of your lashes;"

Yeah.

I sit and wonder if you saw the tag in my witness post today or if, because it was an edit, it was overlooked. Or if you will see this now, even.

I checked my tags this morning, yes. I try to keep up every few days when I can. There's a lot; both of tags, and stuff around all of this. I can't really reconcile a lot of it, and I've been working on taking the space to do so, especially away from the chain. I'm not sure what the 'right' response looks like.

Ok. Thankyou.

love the first picture with the yellow and the spider web

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First time I read you, @crimsonclad, and I will be returning for more. Nevermind form, there’s poetry of feeling, here, compassion with struggle and rallying. In short, the suffering of all things...

Bravo 👏🏼