I’ll wrap blankets around me
folding excess between my knees.
Your kindness hugs me warmer;
Your hands hold me in.
I’ll nestle deep in covers,
pushing into soft stuff pillows.
Your body spoons me smoother
Your skin smothers out my wounds.
I’ll hide far inside our cavern
Hibernating home for winter and spring.
Your laughter brings the sunshine,
Your crashing loud as dawn.
Thanks for sharing as always!
It is a good exercise about your "imaginary" serie!
I just had a doubt regarding "far" because in a direct translation to my language it seems more an adjetive but... its an adverb i thought in english and that context, right?
Because you know what Ezra thinks about that damned word... yes... "adjetive"... just hear the name... :-)
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Yes! The goal is to write more to the prescriptions of Ezra Pound and the Imagist style. To give pure attention to the "thing" instead of abstraction.
I think "far" was an adjective used here, as it describes where in the cavern it is. Adverbs are to be avoided (but I am very guilty; I use them frequently).
You're right; he says use "no adjective which does not contribute something." I take that to mean don't use words that are extra and not connecting to the thing without purpose. Make every word count.
Thank you for your insight! I like how close attention you pay to the words; I believe it is your dual language nature. I'm jealous. I'm weak at foreign languages.
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You dont be jelaous because my english is quite bad, it sucks indeed. Its frustrating dont find the proper words but... its great be able to read and write with all english spoken persons wich are... nearly all world.
I'm training with steemit because it makes me search and learn a lot of vocabulary.
Althought i dont write anything since i was in school(10?) with the typical "what i did in holidays" i think i will have a try and i will post something, of course it will be bad but i hope it makes me improve.
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