In your arms
But it’s a dream for me…
Because I’m not in your arms now
And it grieves me.
I want to share your life
And love
And your loneliness,
The side you hide
From other men,
Yet, I know exists.
I want to bury my face in your hair
Inhale
Snow on the wind,
But the longer we stay apart
I don’t know where to begin.
The moon grieves for lovers apart
Every night it peers in,
But I cannot explain my heart
Or the prison I’m in.
I want to bury my face in your hair
Inhale your mystery
But I fear we’ll die apart
With no history.
I want to live and die
In your arms
But it’s a dream for me…
Because I’m not in your arms now,
And it grieves me.
This is not a poem born at the time of loss; it comes later.
It is not the sharp pain of loss, but the endless ache of memories and pain at the emptiness of your future and at all the might-have-beens
Thanks John.
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yes, you are right, my friend - couldn't have said it better :)
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Beautiful poem @johnjgeddes. There is so much tactile references in this that I find myself smelling the hair and feeling the touches. You have really pulled me into this situation :)
Great work once again John :)
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Thanks so much, Bucky - I know you have great artistic awareness - appreciate this
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Beautiful !! <3
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thanks
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Nice. I don't typically dig the repeated verses, but it worked well within this poem. I especially liked this line:
I want to bury my face in your hair
Inhale your mystery
Thanks for sharing this.
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you're welcome. I didn't like repetition for the longest time, but it can form a cadence if it's simply not xerox reprising of lines.
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An aching sense of loss ( or never was!)
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Kind of reminds me of the poem, But You Didn't:
https://www.familyfriendpoems.com/poem/but-you-didnt-by-merrill-glass
Hey @johnjgeddess are you on steemit chat or discord?
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That's very perceptive - I don't know Merrill Glass but you're right, the same cadence, the same structure, the same use of a repeated line. Maybe it's the basic musical principles of language that we're both drawing upon. Thank you, for such a thoughtful comment,
Re: being on these channels, I really am swamped at the moment but if I find some time I will check them out. I really appreciate your response
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Before 20, advanced for a hug by 30, next to you on a sofa by 40 and leave me alone by 50. Good bye by 60
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seems so true :)
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Great work.
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thank you
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This dream, I know... In this lifetime, only a dream...
Thousands of miles of separation, yet still able to see the same moon.
Though we may die apart, we'll embrace adventures together one day.
😄😇😄
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very beautiful and poetic, my friend. Thank you
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Thank you, John. Your poem reminded me of some feelings temporarily set aside... ;)
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well, you've been very busy lately...actually, a lot of regulars on here seem to have been away for a bit
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Not to take away from your beautiful poem but it reminds me of a song by John Denver called Annie's Song. Do you know it?
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I do - You fill up my senses - lovely lines
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Beautiful...
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thank you
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Fantastic poem.I like your post.
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thanks, @suchi
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Such feelings defy explanation. Beautiful and moving :)
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Oh sweet, makes my heart ache.
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thank you, @lakshmi
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Awesome poetry , I love it
And the picture is so lovely .
Thanks for sharing
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thanks, @lalitswami
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