When I started this poem, I didn't realize how well it would turn out. I had no idea of the ending until I was going along. I think it's one of my better poems, I hope you do also.
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We got married when we were so young
We laughed and loved and had lots of fun
And then one day, just out of the blue
You told me that you found someone new
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I gave you my heart for all of my life
Now you say you don’t want to be my wife
What you are saying I do not understand
How can you be in love with another man
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You walked out the door, my heart was breaking
For days my life I thought about taking
After some thinking and some therapy
I came to realize that it wasn’t me
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It was you that slept in another man’s bed
You broke us apart and you deserve to be dead
So next when you saw me I had a surprise
I shot you both right between the eyes
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I turned myself in and now I’m in a cell
Our whole tragic story for them I did tell
I’ll probably be in prison for the rest of my life
But that’s better than having a whore for a wife
Very intense and emotional, greatly written! Keep going youre awesome! thanks for sharing! :)
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Thank you. I have plenty of poems, but only a few that I consider 'good'. Read the poem "My Mess" on my page. I believe you would like that one also.
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I looked but couldn't find it, must just be missing it :/
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It was 13 days ago from today.
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Like it. I wrote a song very similar to that called You Oughta Run. You can hear it here https://www.reverbnation.com/luigicappel/song/123272-you-oughta-run
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Yeah, I liked that song. I'll listen to a couple more you have there. I like to write songs too, but I don't know how to write music, just lyrics. Think you could look at the one or two I have done and see if you can do anything with them?
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You sound like a depressed Cowboys football fan. Oh wait... you are! lol
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Not depressed, but Mark came by today and he wanted to drink beer. 10 minutes after he left Todd showed up and he wanted to drink beer. It's free so I don't say no.
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And free beer provides you with the inspiration to write dark poems?
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Sure. That would be helpful.
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