Raw Poetry

in poetry •  7 years ago 

A poem that was beautifully written, capturing your mind to take that sad journey with the writer.

This poem was written by dark_horizons, and he happens to be a new poet to the deep underground poetry site.

I can't stress enough how much I love the ability to create so much with words. The ability to make you smile, laugh, cry, and simply just feel, amazes me.

A poem by dark_horizons,

The Voices

It was amidst the furor of a terrible dream
The night the voices came
They were sad and sweet, and far away
And they were calling out my name

Then a voice took the form of a beautiful girl
And she brought forth with her a friend
They were the two most wonderful people
And they talked of the coming end

I listened to them for a long, long time
I hoped the day would never come
Like the night was my only savior
And I would be killed by the morning sun

Then the others who had since been silent
Now broke into a sweet refrain
The king and queen slowly faded away
But I knew that I would see them again

Then the choir of voices sang only to me
A song so sweet and pure
It told of a life so painful
And of how death was the only cure

It was then I awoke in an ice cold sweat
As I ran and got a gun
And it took just a minute to load it
As I sang the song they had sung

And I never knew a feeling so good
As I put the gun up to my head
And I exploded into ecstasy
When the bullet struck me dead

And now I am with them, so sad and lonely
As I search for water in Hell
I sing to those who will never know
And I speak, but will never tell

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Thank you @joseph for sharing dark_horizons poem with us. It is a hauntingly beautiful piece about the darkness of death. The narrator immediately orients the reader within a dream-state. Each stanza builds anticipation as the narrator becomes captivated by the voices. There is foreshadowing of death before the narrator awakes and ultimately takes his own life.

Personally, I focus primarily on performance poetry, but love checking out written works as well.

It'd be great if you could check out my latest post with a brief 2min performance at a local open-mic. Thanks and I'm looking forward to your next post.

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its really a brilliant poem ,beautiful words you have used ,

This is really a deep poem.I think it described a troubled soul and his end brought upon by himself.Really amazing,it takes raw talent to accomplish this.Thanks for sharing

It is a very nice poem even I was expecting a happy ending :( But still beautiful and well said!

Dope! this is some good string of words.

All poems have a voice , which can be called a speaker, i love this poem

Well @joseph Your choice of words is very deep and awesome.

Some lines are long lasting and will remain forever with me

It told of a life so painful
And of how death was the only cure

Let me share a couplet of Great Urdu Poet Saghir Sadiqui (translated Version)

~ I have lived a very painful life
Still wonder! what was my fault ~

Keep sharing such beautiful words #Joseph

This is a sweet poem born of a kind heart. There is power in the expression of words through writing poetry. It gives life to words and help us see its rebirth the ability to express words that would touch even the deepest part of our heart.

When I learned about steemit and found out I can put up my poetry here It tickles my fancy in words I cant express.

I just got started still trying to get a feel of it but I have added about 2 of my poetry in my blog. I look forward to having you poets and poetess as friends so we can share more experience

nice piece

Such a wonderful poetry, i like this, thanks

Beautiful poetry We can share our thoughts through poetry.

Favorite poet in this community! Brilliant stuff man. You inspired me to write a piece. Keep on doing what you do best ;)Happy Holidayss!!!

Good poetry, very touching soul

Thanks for sharing!

wow beautiful words..they are beautifully written..nice one..thanks for sharing :)

Good post))
Thank you))

As beautiful as it is haunting. A hundred WOWs for this one.

Nice work!

Wonderful!

that's what we call talent.

Beautiful one see mine too

superb poem, I have never written any poetry, though I do draw and paint, so not much time left for writing it seems, or maybe even with enough time, I would still not write poetry

lovely poem keep up the good work @joseph.

I love it!

Heart wrenching!

And I exploded into ecstasy"""" beautiful words.

Great poem! Thanks for sharing it with us!

Oh man. That is really good. Its so poignant. I love it

Not only did I enjoyed glamourously the lines of your poem. The drama attached to it were so dramatic to the point that the simple choice of words transported me to the scene. The only solution was death and I have wondered what would have been the song the king and Queen Sang that the subejct also sang... Your use of imagery and metaphors were impressive... Sincerely, this is creativity

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