Begins Hopeful 🔥 Then Rage Comes To Claim

azizulhassan (65) · 7 years ago

well really loved this one specially the last line of the post ... the blockchain will save this

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ninegags (51) · 7 years ago

Wow, i really loved this and adapts to one of my life experiences.
Its hard to forget someone that we loved and that left us, but after some years i felt it was the best, the only regret i have is to have waited so long feeling sorry for myself.

Also great use of this 🔥⭐️✨ to separate the different parts.

I always admire someone that can write good poetry, since i've tried in the past and i'm really bad at it.

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6 votes

lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago (edited)

I disagree. I believe you are a writer at heart, @ninegags.

I upvoted you to be sure you would see and all my readers would see my reply. Please note: your words resonated strongly. I believe that you should read the last sentence in your post, again. You should officially stop thinking “I’m really bad at it” because... if you believe that, perhaps you make it true.
I highly recommend thinking back to the time when you felt embarrassed by your writing skills. Someone may have pointed it out or someone made fun of you.. something happened that made you think you were bad at poetry. You should try thinking this:
“I might be GREAT at poetry. Writing beautiful language is a long term plan and over time I will get better at it. I will!”
Say that to yourself Instead of saying you are “really bad at it”.

You can let go of that thought. I think in your heart you are a writer and you will only find true peace when you let yourself try again.

Good luck honey.♥️

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ninegags (51) · 7 years ago

Thank you so much for the upvote and your nice words!
Maybe my skills are better at writing texts than poetry, i always have trouble finding good rhymes even in my mother language.
“I might be GREAT at poetry. Writing beautiful language is a long term plan and over time I will get better at it. I will!”
Loved this, but instead of poetry i think i will change for fiction texts, i'm a big fan of science-fiction movies about space travel and shows like stargate and star trek. Wouldn't mind writing a script for one episode since i have a pretty good imagination :)
I loved your words and your post. It made my day :)
Thank you so much, sweety ♥️♥️♥️

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6 votes

pangoli (69) · 7 years ago

When you stepped in and stepped up to the plate
You became something only real love can create.

Wow. simply wow... you made picking a favourite line difficult for me.

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lucygarrod (51) · 7 years ago (edited)

Wow Lori! I wish I could express myself like you do in your poems. You have an incredible gift to keep your head even when angry. I usually just start cussing when I am angry. You are AMAZING lovely lady! Hope today brings laughter and happy vibes 🤗

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

Thanks my friend!

Good to see your cute face as always.

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kiwisteem (0) · 7 years ago (edited)

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago (edited)

I actually was not finished yet when I wrote that part. Please reread the last few lines of the poem. It’s now a little less offensive. Nothing wrong with saying “Fuck you!” When it’s deserved though. Kiwi, I adore you as you know. Let’s play some yahoo games or something.

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kiwisteem (0) · 7 years ago (edited)

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themanwithnoname (64) · 7 years ago

I saw it was a longer poem, so I've had it open for a while waiting to get in the head space to read it.

I started this poetry sweet and benign
But as I composed it something changed in the mind

I kinda felt that as you were going. It started out like things were repairing and going well, but then it took a turn. Feels like things got taken for granted, then escalated, now numbness.

Isn't it strange how much can change while we talk about something. I've started to just stop and think about something else (if I can) when I get too worked up. I don't want to spiral, so I just stop. I'll revisit those thoughts when I'm ready. :)

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

Yes, my “something else” is writing. This makes for good reads and has the reward of sharing with you guys and girls.. plus I feel better after writing about it all

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themanwithnoname (64) · 7 years ago

And you get to work on your writing, so you don't get rusty, plus you can get rewards when people vote on your posts. It's a pretty good system all around! win-win-win-win-win-win (I don't know, I lost track and just kept going...)

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syedfahad (38) · 7 years ago

Amazing poerty,on this i have my own two lines poem i wana dedicated to you@lorilikes
"Only dust blews
Or this lonliness,
Every moment this painful
Heart with 100 of scars,
I am far away from you
Neither i got God nor you,

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mohammadkaleem (40) · 7 years ago

Amazing, your post is better than average. As I would see it easily. Good posWow extraordinary occupation, you are magnificent in without fail. Your essence turns each difficult to conceivable. You have that power so your name is @lorilikes.Thanks for sharing such an uplifting and left verse. Have an extremely delightful time ahead.

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praise-eu (67) · 7 years ago

I hope it is not in real life. You dont wish it happen to those you care and pray for. Life? It is only Jesus Christ that can smoothen the rough edges of man. Let him.

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

I had a fight with my partner it was not good. I wish no harm to anyone even though we fight. Don’t worry my anger is gone thankfully. ❤️

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praise-eu (67) · 7 years ago

Shalom

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arunchaubey21 (47) · 7 years ago

Your writing is beautiful. It seems very organized and clean when it is all written out, and i know it took a few drafts and lots of deleting before this piece so beautiful came out. Looking forward to read more such beautiful verses. 😍

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

I appreciate the words of encouragement, thanks. It takes some major backspacing you are right.

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jrb450 (53) · 7 years ago

My heart hurts for you...I admire the way you seemingly process it through the words and arrangements you use. I'm sorry for the struggle you endure. Hugz my friend!

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

Awww thanks. This is my therapy so it’s always a positive thing when I am expressing it here and not at some dysfunctional place. ❤️🦋❤️

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dhirupadhyay (44) · 7 years ago

""When you stepped in and stepped up to the plate
You became something only real love can create.""
this line i tell won my heart
you put my feeling from heart out
u dont know how much i can relate this to my life
i am just loving this poetry
i took a screenshot of this
@lorilikes

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

Glad you appreciate my mind, my words. Cool⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

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dhirupadhyay (44) · 7 years ago

talents is to be appreciated @lorilikes

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naeemahmedd (49) · 7 years ago

Wow really good writing thanks for shere @lorilikes

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sofia-a (35) · 7 years ago

great poetry ♥ @lorilikes the best thing i have read today

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venox (48) · 7 years ago (edited)

@lorilikes Thank you very much for sharing. I enjoyed reading. Screen savers that were allowed

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

?? Screen savers??

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sanach (70) · 7 years ago

This is a quite interesting poem! You've a sharp minded Mam! to write a poem positive way. I like to read your poetry :)
Keep it up!!!

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geek.phoenix (44) · 7 years ago

Wowwww.
Amazing poem ma'am. As always you have come up with one more meaningful poem that teach something and may realize much more.

I like these line more:

Our love is something so cherishable
Despite failing tests we aren’t perishable

Do not mistake my willingness to start this fresh
For something you and I will both regret

Love talks, in between, it’s not in our control
Master plan, it’s impossible watch it unfold.

Thanks for sharing such a beautiful poem. Keep posting more like this.

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sansastark (44) · 7 years ago

owo its really beautifull mem @lirilikes thanks for shaeing this adviced

resteem

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sid9999 (52) · 7 years ago

Remember me? I’m the same girl who you love
This pattern of yelling, a push then a shove

You got my mind racing
The hallways ...I’m pacing
This lines were surely the best and I would not hesitate to say you really make wonderful poems and always I read your post I surely get that positive vibes which is needed to drive a person in this hectic world full of complexity and all... Thanks a lot for making such beautiful composition!!

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taylor10 (57) · 7 years ago

superb poetry and excellent writing mam

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sanjib (50) · 7 years ago

What a amazing poetry man.I like it your poetry.

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sv1rby (51) · 7 years ago

Nice poem!! Can I make a suggestion for a next poem??

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

Sure, what is your suggestion? ⭐️

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sv1rby (51) · 7 years ago

a luckygames poem!!! :D

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lorilikes (53) · 7 years ago

Lol maybe sure

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hazelalex (67) · 7 years ago

This is a quite message for blockchain. Very nice to read in this way.its a really good advice for blockchain 😊

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wiralhokseumawe (60) · 7 years ago

every stanza I have read his poem is so touching till I dissolved in it till shed tears when (nightmare But it is real and very cruel and I am tired of crying I am amazing and I have done too) you are a wonderful person who really loving .thanks miss @lorilikes
for his beautiful poetry.
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jofri47 (6) · 7 years ago

this is defrent poetry i seee in steemit @lorilikes thanks for shareing

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