Slow pulsing
Sweet convulsing
✨How did I get here this time
Eyes struggle *open now *
Sickening smoky clouds
✨I will remember this climb
Poisonous medicine
Instant regret sets it
✨Beginning the end as I wake up
Venomous healer speaks
Distorted days and weeks
✨Watch my will bend as it breaks up
I know this is not what you intended, but your poem sounds like the start of a really interesting Sci-fi/near future movie. Something about someone who falls asleep, only to wake up disoriented in a dystopian future.
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I like the concept and we should write it. One scene at a time. Here on steemit ! As an ongoing project. You think?
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Oh wow, how would you do that in Steemit. Each scene would be a post?..but then people wouldn't be able to cooperatively edit it... or would you do it in comments. I have to think on that more.
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Well the prologue is done. Just start a new post linking to the prologue, and write a simple short first chapter. Keep it brief. Then tag me in it, and be sure to link to the prologue. And when you are done, label it chapter 1. I will then post a new post with links to the prologue and the first chapter. Then you post new one with link to prologue, chapter 1 chapter 2 and you write chapter 3. Until maybe 10 chapters. It will be fun. Your turn!
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Oh wow, what did I just get myself into? Okay, I'm going to need a few days, but I will give it a try. Shall I write it in prose or screenplay style? I've never written a screenplay so I probably wouldn't do well with that for the first time so I'm inclined to stick with prose.
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Whatever you want. No rules yet. We can make the rules up as we go.
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I have not forgotten. Life has just hit me from multiple directions right now and I'm trying to keep up.
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Do not worry - I am also very over limit on tasks now, too.
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Thank you have reminded me about death.
Death is indeed shaped promise and ties.
Sometimes I like to looking through a window, where yields rose fell to the ground
Aromatic and fragrant to vacuum
From there I understand death.
a good @lorilikes thank you for your friendship.
Continue thy life here from far away I will always support you
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Nice juxtaposition of word selection and imagery; it amplifies the meaning.
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Thank you for being real. I adore real people. I adore you! 🦋✨
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"Poisonous medicine
Instant regret sets it
✨Beginning the end as I wake up"
This is "simply beautiful"
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There are things in life which we experience and feel the vibes.... After a certain time period we lose the essence of those emotions And whenever we get the same vibes in a certain incident we remember the incident occured earlier which relates to that vibe.
Slowly and steadily reading each verse of your poems brings back the emotions.
Slow pulsing - the day when i first saw my love i could hear the slow pulses the slow heartbeat of my heart...
Sweet convulsing - looking at her i slipped and got contraction of the leg muscle
✨How did I get here this time - damn how can some lines make me go back to the past how did i get here
the day when we went camping from our school
Eyes struggle *open now * - the first morning after a bad climb
Sickening smoky clouds - as i opened my eyes in dark night
✨I will remember this climb - i do remember the camping trip.
The days when i get sick...
Poisonous medicine - the bitter medicines my doc prescribed..
Instant regret sets it - what did i do that made me this sick arrr...
✨Beginning the end as I wake up - after the medication whenever i wake up its the end of my sickness
Kinda cool.
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Is this your interpretation or translation?
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Neither interpretation nor translation just the thoughts that arise when i read your poems... Its better to let you know what thoughts arise when we read your poems.. Was it too lame 😅
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Not lame. Very nice to have a real conversation so thank you.
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Hehe!! I'm glad you liked it😃
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the straight road looks long, it is passed by everyone, this is the journey of life with full of twists and turns that must pass, we must step because tomorrow is not equal to today. every step is the direction of the wind that blows the smoke that must be passed. do not ever get caught in a grim path because its end will be blurry @lorilikes every verse poem that I read very touch. honestly from the beginning I follow you there is no intention never in the heart to just pretend because of the fact that your poetry is beautiful and classy, I make you my motivation write.
Thanks you so much @lorilikes
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A sleepwalker? You might just wake up and find all is gone.... Then regrets. So I always struggle to keep my eyes open. You are so good Lori and I wish to learn stuffs from you.
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That’s a huge compliment from you. Yay! 😍
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Sounds like one of those mistakes that a person can make again and again. They don't want to fall into it, but do. Those cycles can be tough to get out of. I've been there. That's one of the reasons I wrote my last post, to encourage myself that I can do better and that I'm not going to let failure or frustration or disappointment (in other or myself) get me down. I have to keep fighting to move ahead. And I'm going to attempt to be positive while I do that. :)
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Beautiful, and very cryptic- but I totally understand. You understand.
🦋
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Yep. Looking forward to good news though!
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They do not want to fall into it, but do. The cycle can be difficult to overcome. I've been there. That is one reason why I am writing my last post, to encourage myself that I can do better and that I will not allow failure or frustration or disappointment (in others or myself) to disappoint me. I have to keep struggling to move forward. And I will try to be positive when I do that.
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When I long for,
Want to write a million beautiful poems,
I want to tell you
About all to-kangenanku.
At the moment it's as if I'm hard to find
The docks are aqueous gold ink
And an antique pen to carve it,
I was afraid of being stranded on a foreign island,
Which is full of @lorilikes uncertainty
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Interesting!
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💃
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You're always on point. Choosing the right words always. You established a lovely rhythm to the words , the stanzas seem to coil in on themselves-first going out and then coming back again. At least that was the sense I got while reading.
I am happy to make the comment and be part of the poem. That is satisfying in itself.
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Thank you for genuine comments on the fine details of my style in this poem. It’s hard to do, and I spent many hours on this very short poem so I appreciate your observations, more than you know.
Thanks. ❤️
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We live full of risks and beautiful colors, we pass through all the fire barriers. We take refuge, we are a storm of sea storms that disappear within the span of time forever. Good post @lorilikes
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nice poem i likr read this poem
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dear @lorilikes ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
My heart wondered around the pedestal of the great and there I found solace and my soul said "you will be greater than these greats.
Thank you for this poem, and that line in particular. You’ve made my day.
stay blessed.
upvoted and resteem
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every pic you posted here delivers a deep message which could be understood with whole different level of understanding
thankyou for posting @lorilikes
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Life is a test with magnificent hues, we run snow through the fire entryways. We are lions, we are a sandy tempest that vanishes in the period of forever.
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@magoo-1 always on duty.
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Oh my GOSH. Thank you SO much!!!!!!! @magoo there are more too. I can show you.
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Wonderful @lorilikes amaze post
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Amazing
post
my
friend.
Pictures
are
cool.
The
poem
meaning
is belong to
the poet.
Great post @lorilikes
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I enjoyed reading your post. There is a lot of good stuff.
Thank you for this article.
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your post are great. nice poem. thanks for share
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Im still waiting for the luckygames-poem hehe :D
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Every life remains death waiting, so is your poem @lorilikes I am amazed at you in poetry, so also with me @tnv1989 will always be there and always follow your day.
I really like the poems you have shared so far, thank you very much @lorilikes
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Very mean your poem mam @lorilikes
Honest
I can not say anything anymore,
This mouth can not move anymore,
Mami is amazing,
Let me be your role model in writing mami,
I LOVE YOU MOM
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This is simply beautiful poem. I love poem.
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Life is a challenge with wonderful colors, we run snow through the fire gates. We are lions, we are a sandy storm that disappears in the age of eternity. We look at the stars in the perfect resonance of the cosmic power, we are sewing love in the hands of the truth that leads us through various ways.
may god bless you and your family dear @lorilikes
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@magoo-1 always on duty.
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I really like your poetry. It touches my heart, I really appreciate your poetry. thank you poetry postingkan mother @lorilikes I always wait for your poetry mother. It means so much to me mom @lorilikes
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The post is very scary, in this poem I so know the meaning of life in death, which when we fall and rise again. thank you @lorilikes I love your poetry.
regards know me @ernova
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Each of your posts has a profound meaning
It's really amazing
I want to study like you
So I can write
Teach me mamma
Woww Very very nice
i love you mami @lorilikes
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owo i appreciate your post @lorilikes
restteeem
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@magoo-1 on duty now.
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the story of a moving journey of life, I am absorbed in this poem.
Thakns you ao much @lorilikes
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So byutifull
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good night, as long as i follow you you really like poetry poem from you @lorilikes i want to learn nenulis dari anda
May I ask link discord from you?
thank you
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Thank you @lorilikes's mother has shared a post in a poem that distinguishes whichever is the will which is health and mystery,
continued success of @lorilikes mother I will always follow and like your poetry pieces.
I love you mom @lorilikes
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you are a very talented writer, I really admire writers like you.
if you do not mind you can visit my blog because I am again making a project about "next generation care" hopefully you are impressed. thank you
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I will join.
but I have not understood.
because I just joined how many hours ago
I just made a post introduction myself.
hopefully we can join.
Tomorrow, i am post poetry .
Nice your poetry (y) .
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Very nice,, i am resteem yes your post @lorilikes
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Fantastic poetry... really interesting... :)
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