longiniquity

geekorner (58) · 7 years ago (edited)

You arouse me with your touch,
though I can't see your hands.
You have kissed me with tenderness,
although I haven't seen your lips.
You are hidden from me,
but it is you that keeps me alive.

-Rumi.

As a lover of words, this piece was a treat on that front alone. "Longinquity" is a great word, as it means "remoteness," yet conveys the image of longing, which is this piece's core.
"Pellucid" is a new word for me, rare as that is. Susurrus is a word I love (and which appeared in the original draft of "Poem of Protection"!), and "trill" is a criminally underused word.

The music used was very well chosen, the austere non-tonal string music. I've long been interested in that music, not something I listen to constantly, but something I put on now and then, when the mood is right. A combination of austerity and classicism, which fits with the bare structure of the poem. Simple lines, repeating structure. And also the outfit you wear and the black and white video.
And then came the oni mask. Must admit I did not see it coming. A mask, while speaking of being unseen. A sad demoness.

But I see you. Even when I can't look at you, lest it burns the sight from me, I see by your light. And yet, we spoke of this. There is a closeness, and there is a closeness. And yours are always the veils, to try and hide behind. Mystique comes naturally to a witch, does it not? The only thing scarier than not being understood, is being understood. To have others see us as we are.
Even, perhaps especially, if we shine as brightly as you do.

I also noticed the absence of Earth, in this piece. Earth is the space, keeping two apart.

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mamadini (56) · 7 years ago

That bit of Rumi is a lovely pairing with this piece. <3

I started with the music. I was just playing around and then found the magic chord and watched the rest form. From there the words started to surface and as you can see, the Muse came out to dance.

I enjoy these more austere landscapes, they really seem to pack a punch, especially after having done a bunch of garish pieces as I have of late.

As always, your perceptions are sharp -- Earth, though missing may have the most presence in this piece over the other elements. It's always in the unspoken one may find the heart of the ditty. ;)

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geekorner (58) · 7 years ago

Less really is more in poetry, quite often. I say, even as this piece is overflowing with those delicious words I like so much. But, while the words are rich, there is much space around them, letting them breathe. And yes, definitely in voice-art, the urge to overcome the viewer must be overcome at all angles.

And this muse, she's always dancing, oh yes.

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themadrunnah (43) · 7 years ago (edited)

These are heating up and I love it! Excited also to see the reply to this :)

It's always interesting to see what kind of atmosphere you'll be matching to the words in the video, what timber your voice will be, and the sounds that will play off of it.

mamadini (56) · 7 years ago

::giggles::

Let the muse out and she'll dance (at least I've always found this to be true ) -- and she's dancing.

I'm always surprised when I've finished one of these, it's such a mysterious process, I have ideas and then all the magic is in the "mistakes" or unexpected things... A bit of fairy dust.

Thank you for your lovely words and stopping by. :)

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colormecalamity (41) · 7 years ago

wondrous & lovely. I love this.

mamadini (56) · 7 years ago

Thank you, Love. I really love this one too.

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poetrybyjeremy (58) · 7 years ago

I love your videos. They give a unique feel/perspective to your poems. The editing (especially of the voice) is something that I really enjoyed (both in this and in a previous video), so I will be looking forward to more of your poetry videos!

As for the poems itself, I love how it's structured equally. You start with your actions and the elements of nature. Then the other person is right there, but you are not in the same situation. It is quite interesting how the rest of the poem progresses. Through difficult words (I admit, I struggle), I do catch the vibe of the other person seeing right through you, as if you were ghost-like, or not present.

mamadini (56) · 7 years ago

Thank you kindly. :)

There shall be more, I love doing these time-arts pieces and feel like I've got a momentum going (learning curve).

Your insight is astute -- I never share my intent as I feel that takes away from the experience for others. I approach all art this way, however, your observations are a pleasure to read. Again, thank you and glad to meet you.

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aliv (28) · 7 years ago

Nice one.thanks for knowing us.it'a beautiful poem.hope all guys like it.keep it up.waiting for your next post

mamadini (56) · 7 years ago

Thank you, that is very nice of you. :)

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leveuf (67) · 7 years ago

There's no more words, but be grateful with the beauty of your poem and voice!! Only the best vibes for you, @mamadini!!

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mamadini (56) · 7 years ago

@leveuf

Thank you, you are always so kind. <3

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