what is broken.
You a heaping pile
of shards.
pointing my way;
you needle-prick
of a man.
everywhere.
I’ll try to put them
back together,
yet I know
you’ll never
look the same.
there is a void of light
sucking in what is
not there.
just to see you
in form once more;
long enough
to walk away
before you
shatter all-over
again.
All pieces are newly crafted and posted shortly after in adherence to the rules of the challenge. All the photos are mine unless otherwise stated.
Entry for Day 32 of 100 Days of Poetry Challenge by @d-pend.
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It's interesting to compare this piece to Reditus, which you wrote two months ago.
Both of them are about a broken man, one who is hollow, one whom you seek to shatter, and to reconstruct anew. But where in that poem you summoned the concepts of reconciliation and forgiveness, of trying to reconstruct the man so he could move on, and you shattering him was in order to reconstruct him, this poem comes from quite a different position.
Here, let's look at how it ends. Here there is no hope of setting him free, of leaving him so he could be free of you, free for himself. There is no hope of him becoming someone worthwhile. Here not only will be crash and burn once you leave, but you are full of anger, and only seek to see him reconstructed for him to be able to fully appreciate you leaving, to see him shatter again.
And that takes the piece in quite a different direction once it ends, from where it begins. It begins as if you're trying to set things right, and a broken man. But then we see that all the broken and jagged ends are weaponized, against you. Not a relationship that is broken. Not jagged ends pointing in both directions.
And the man is so thin. He's just wide enough to contain a rapier of darkness within him. He is a black hole of energy, of light, trying to draw you in, because you are everything it lacks.
Though going by this piece, you can be just as sharp, for this poem is sharp as a tack. But you try to shine light, to show the path, to show the way. To both yourself and him.
Also, I was amused by the title (and I use "amuse" in an entirely positive way) - for those who don't know, "Shabby shabby" and "Stabby stabby" were lines in the piece before it was published, and so it made me smile to see how they still ended up in the published piece :)
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Nice poem and The photos are so poetic!
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Thank you Silvia. <3
I was sad when that Pitcher broke, however, the photos of it in ruin have served me well.
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All those sharp words
pointing my way;
you needle-prick
of a man.
A pen with force. Wonderful work, Mamadini:)
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<3
Thank you. I was having a bit of a wicked-tongue moment there. Feels good to get it out though, via art. ;)
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