Consumed
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dainty feet
upon compact sand
pressure, small but felt
by the smaller creatures
of the near-deep
they share kinship
with Aphrodite
but not her form
both, born from shell
destined to be consumed
like the courtship
of Hades and Persephone
tides cut existence in two
the warmth of the sun
comes with the day-horror
of beaks and clam-diggers
until the fickle moon
returns the heavy blanket
cold, wet, and dark
then the smaller creatures
of the near-deep
feed on even more
minuscule things
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Consumed is copyright Pryde Foltz
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Truly beautiful. It shows the life, to eat and be eaten
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Fortunately there is a lot more in between but yes. Life consumes life:)
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The whole poem is a mythological metaphor about how the clam compares with the goddess Aphrodite, goddess of love. Reference is made to the two shells that serve as shelter and contain the body that is the edible part of the creature of the sea, but also speaks of the division of existence, with that form and it could be speculated that it also compares it with the genital part female for some suggested images Very beautiful, dear Pryde
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Yeah ... that is pretty close to the intend of the poem. Although I would argue that it extrapolates to all the desires and hunger of life. Thanks for this wonderfully close read, Zeleria:)
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I wont embarrass myself with trying to comment on the entirety, but will put in unfortunately nature is based on the bloody tooth and claw. Not how I would design it, but it is what it is.
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Thanks, Paul;) Renewal does not always come in a spring wind ... that is for sure. But the only way out of it ... is the way out of a materialist existence.
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..."feed on even more minuscule things."
Such a primal energy in this one. And a fractal, worlds-within-worlds feeling to the comparison of tiny sea creatures with a goddess:
"both, born from shell
destined to be consumed"
So many of these lines echo darkly. Beautiful.
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So glad you liked and picked up on the subtler details:)
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“the warmth of the sun come with day-horror...
Haha I like that 👍
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Thanks, Moon:)
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a curious origin myth when you think about it, and a nice segue into other creatures of the deep :)
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It is a funny one but after writing this poem, it all made sense to me:):):)
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I like this poem very much for its beauty and simplicity and because I myself write a lot of poetry about the sea and sea creatures. Sea creatures are a source of inspiration and you beautifully describe a small world of things happening without us noticing, and the way tides, like night and day, rule the life-cycle of the creatures in the tidal zone.
The references to Greek mythology is a recurrent motif with which I also identify myself.
I'm sorry if this feedback comes out as egotistic (since I'm making reference to my own work). I just wanted to remark some common sources of inspiration.
It's very interesting the way you give exposure to a dark side one doesn't necessarily think of:
An the fact that the victim of such horror do the same onto smaller beings:
Seeing things from the less common point-of-view is a good way to enrich imagery.
This feedback is not academic in any way, but an impressionist one, and I hope you like it.
I'll leave you with this little gem of animation (a short film) that your poem made me recall (it's visual poetry, so to speak):
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Thank you, Sanson:) I much appreciate the feedback but even more the visit and knowing that the work impacted on you. Truly that is a great reward:)
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I'm going to owe you loads of money, with all theses upvotes :))
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No you won't. It is how the game is played here:):):)
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:):):)
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i'm resteem it.
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