The graveyard is filled with lovers
The bars are filled with bones
We search for hearts in empty cages
And always go home alone
A Mausoleum lover
Silent as a tomb
I’ve been dead already
Since the day you left the room
We make love to corpses
Our hands unclean with ash
of past verse and roses
that never seem to last
We push aside
phantom limbs
of past Them
and pretend
we’re not dead already
The morning comes all deathly quiet
It was long ago bereaved
Is she even breathing?
Has she planned to leave?
It may be macabre
But, pulses are for those that care
I’ve been dead already
Only my bones are here
We make love to corpses
Our hands unclean with ash
of past verse and roses
that never seem to last
We push aside
phantom limbs
of past Them
and pretend
we’re not dead already.
She picked out the gravestone
She picked out the plot
She went to go live
And left me here to rot.
I dug my own grave
I simply reached too deep
I’ve been dead already
My soul for the worms to keep.
We make love to corpses
Our hands unclean with ash
of past verse and roses
that never seem to last
We push aside
phantom limbs
of past Them
and pretend
for just one moment,
we are not dead already.
We are not dead already.
We’re already dead.
Notes: A lyrical poem that could easily be set to a song. Some sad progressive-rock ballad, I assume. It speaks to the way we barely love other people while still dead inside from past relationships and lost loves. I wrote this after going through something very similar. My heart was elsewhere, and any action I took within relationship #2 was always filtered through the corpse-like remains of relationship #1. I am sure it may resonant with a few of you, and I hope you enjoy.
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Wow it's really artistic and deep
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Thanks for sharing.
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Really wonderful poem! There is an interesting message if we try to find it in the middle of the lines :)
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I really liked the metaphor and the way the rhythm carried it throughout. I'm not a big fan of repeating verses, but I appreciated its importance for amplifying the last lines. Good write.
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed. At its heart, I think it's trying to be a song. We'll see if it ever gets put to a beat. I'm musically
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...challenged? I know how you feel, I'm the same way. Whether a song or poetry, this is an exceptional piece.
If you have some time, I'd be grateful if you could check out some of the stuff on my blog. I'm not asking you to comment or upvote unless you feel compelled to do so. I just like to have my stuff read by other poets. Feel free to criticize as well. Just don't write a hate poem about it ;-)... (just kidding). BTW, I liked that one too, even though I was expecting to loath it.
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I like the overall spirit and feel you've got going. I always wished I was musically inclined, lyrics vs. verse and all...
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wow i love this! i write a lot of poetry but i've never been good at writing song lyrics or stuff, but this is great!
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Interesting work. I enjoyed this macabre piece. It definitely seems like it could be the lyrics to a dark song. The repetition of the (refrain?chorus?) gave a nice rhythm to the piece overall. Thanks for sharing!
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Glad you enjoyed.
I think it'd be a solid song. Some prog-rock ballad, or nu-metal song. :)
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