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A quiet passion
I own you
and you
own me
in a silken net
sort of way
So many ways
to be entangled
But the subtlest is love
the most deadly
but gentle
is love and
I don't know how it'll
all go but I
thank Time for
each moment
I can remember and
for the feel of your hand
And I thank the velvet Darkness
for summer nights
and an unoccupied
bed
Special thanks to @geke for the inspiration to post my stream of consciousness writing, and a big shout-out to the editors at Isle of Write for helping to edit it, especially @geekorner.
art and flair courtesy of @PegasusPhysics
Image is free to use from snapstock.io
Poetry is property of @Sunravelme
There's this uber strong moment in there:
"So many ways
to be entangled
But the subtlest is love"
It gives underpinning to what follows and a huge sense of gravitas. Good stuff! Great poem.
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Beautiful! You are inspiring me to use my creative energy more. Thank you <3
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I'm so excited to see more from you! One of my favorite parts about steemit is workshopping and having the opportunity to see other people's work!
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Thank you! I love the way Steemit connects everyone. It has been so wonderful to feel able to break out of my shell and post more. Thanks for all of the support!
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I love the dark underbelly of this along with the lusciousness of the words closer to the surface.
<3
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mannnn I love thinking about what "a silken net sort of way means." It's that kind of tactile detail that reaches deeper than even the senses can go.
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Beautiful work,dear. The beauty of good poetry is when the poet is able to communicate his or her emotions about what he/she is writing about. At that point the reader or listener begins to feel what the poet feels or felt. This is what you @sunravelme has done with this work. Congrats,ma. I will love others to see this.
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I really liked the personification of Time and Darkness. I thought those were nice twists. This poem left me with a feeling of excitement and content followed by a bit of mystery. Nice write. Thanks for sharing.
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this line ''And I thank the velvet Darkness'' just made my day.
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I'm so glad! I normally write dark stuff, this was one of the few happier ones that I've produced
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o0o0o I love this very much. A beautiful expression on your part! <3 Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you! I really liked your poetry- the idea of carrying each other when times are hard is such a good one!
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It's important <3 Thank you kindly!!
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sort of way
So many ways
to be entangled
mmm, these three lines sound entangled...... love these words and images
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Thank you lovely! Always nice to hear from you :)
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Dear @sunravelme,
I began feeling content and ended with a stirring inside. Now to seek out my own silken net.
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Yay for the silken net! Thank you for all your recommendations in the workshop!
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A lovely nugget of writing!
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Thank you Amber!
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thats rare lovely. well done
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Thank you! It was fun to go through the workshopping process on it
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Good nice
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within short period of time, and you have canvas such upovote.i salute you
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Sure is easier to canvas the sea of steemit for upvotes than paint a canvas with poetry, eh?
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i think i will like to learn the act of canvassing upvote from you
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