On the wing

in poetry •  6 years ago  (edited)


On the wing


How many coops have we flown,
and broken free for a weekend or two?
How many towns have we graced?
By now it must be more than a few.

Scraping coin and eating scraps,
for a chance to get a moment away.
Remember that time the waiter asked,
Are you sure you two can pay?

Was it our clothes, my look,
or perhaps it was your unkempt hair.
Whatever it was no matter
And no heed paid to the stares.

Rich is not in the owning of things,
it is in the giving away of hearts.
The paying the future with hands held,
shallow pockets and lost parts.

Stolen kisses turned to stolen bags,
security is the held illusion.
We thought we could escape the pain,
living beyond our new delusion.

Fail it would and we would fall
Through the gaps in pavement walked
Where once the flowers grew
and over ice cream we talked.

You hid from me, but I found you out
Flying where none others flew
Face buried in hands
Tears hidden away from view

None could see, but then none tried
The world has lost its task.
Most run at another's signs of pain
Away and never to, as to few ever ask.

Perhaps we are perfect with damage
providing me the fuel to move.
We can fly together on the winds of time
But eventually we both will lose.


Taraz
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I like the alliteration of the 's' sound most rampant in this piece really, the rhetorical questions gave it a beautiful edge too, it's awesome and natural, what inspired you?

When it comes to poetry, I just write and see how it goes. For me , it is a little chance at finding structure in disconnected thoughts.

  ·  6 years ago (edited)

The title reminded me of this

On the wings of the night
As the daytime is stirring
Where the speechless unite
In a silent accord

Using words you will find are strange
And mesmerized as they light the flame
Feel the new wind of change
On the wings of the night

So yeah, you could say you're the Dave Gilmour of Steem.

So yeah, you could say you're the Dave Gilmour of Steem.

ha, I wish.

Who's gonna argue about it anyway?

A new flag war...

I loved these lines;

Through the gaps in pavement walked
Where once the flowers grew
and over ice cream we talked.

It paints a picture of something without romance then the line of you guys talking over ice-cream brings the romance back. Basically something like love in the time of cholera or in love and war or something similar. It is beautiful anyway.

I love the spontaneous nature of the poem and the fact that you didn't edit much of structure and grammar. It gives it a realistic and urgent feel.

Basically something like love in the time of cholera or in love and war or something similar.

This is about the crux of it.

Really nice poerty . All lines is meaningful . I like your poem . Thanks for sharing @tarazkp

Oh I love this. Thanks for sharing my friend

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@tarazkp I really liked your poetry very much.Is it your part time hobby or you occasionally write them?

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