When I am gone

in poetry •  7 years ago  (edited)

The fog creeps by, rolling over my toes
Slowly I fade at peace in shadow
In life there were laughs and smiles and tears
experiences shared, realisation of fears
We made memories but by memory's law
They will die a sharp death on the blackened shore

When I am gone.

The loss of life, the gain all blown
So many a word claimed all were unknown
Promises of riches by account of action
The tally dependent on the subscribed faction
They do not understand but all will see
Only one way over can there ever be

When I am gone.

They knew me they said, knew who they saw
The pictures and words and all I stood for
The sum of life counted by what was left
Some laughed at my passing, few were bereft
No matter I say, no matter it truly is
All end to end be it crackle or fizz

When I am gone.

In passing the highs of happy and love
The hand of pain chose to wear no glove
Many lives crossed, many a scarred word
Life paths changed if never be heard
Destiny and fate, uttered into the winds
Living under the directions of other's sins

When I am gone.

In world of care, a world of scorn
A world tied up with bows, brick and horn
The story of one blended into the many
All continue a pauper, undollared, unpennied
The bodies are gone, poorly they travel
So many fibres knitted start to unravel

When I am gone.

To live a full life is to embrace the will
Look into the dark and move further still
Be shouldered by those kneeling or tall
Walk fast, run slow, tumble and crawl
All destinations lead onto the pointed
The sharpened spear of the never anointed

When I am gone.

The shadows of me get thrown up high
To be caught by the wings of the clear sky
Carried far across land, forest, sea
Returned to the place that first found me
Standing by stone, tree or plot
In time, in time, you will remember me not

When I am gone.

Taraz
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you will never be gone from the steem blockchain ;). Nice poem by the way.

really sweat meaningful words wonderful poen and really nice immage

You're so nice for commenting on this post. For that, I gave you a vote!

I don't know what to write so I'm giving you waffles recipe:

2 eggs
2 cups all-purpose flour
1 3/4 cups milk

1/2 cup vegetable oil
1 tablespoon white sugar
4 teaspoons baking powder
1/4 teaspoon salt
1/2 teaspoon vanilla extract

Directions:
Preheat waffle iron. Beat eggs in large bowl with hand beater until fluffy. Beat in flour, milk, vegetable oil, sugar, baking powder, salt and vanilla, just until smooth.
Spray preheated waffle iron with non-stick cooking spray. Pour mix onto hot waffle iron. Cook until golden brown. Serve hot.

Now I feel like waffles...

Getting 30 cents for a copy pasted recipe? That's definitely the biggest achievement in my life

I don't have a waffle iron else it would have been 45.

this is beautiful. Loved this verse;

In world of care, a world of scorn
A world tied up with bows, brick and horn
The story of one blended into the many
All continue a pauper, undollared, unpennied
The bodies are gone, poorly they travel
So many fibres knitted start to unravel

It seems you had to soberly reflect on death today. I can feel the mood of the poem as that of disenchantment.

Do not fret the coming dark
It's power over thee is nought but dust.
Do not finger the bones of tomorrow
Seeking understand and a succoured touch.
Let the fire, it's light claim,
Let the earth, it's skin caress;
When we are gone,
The sun, the moon and the stars will shine on
And you, could be a meteor
Sailing distant shores,
Finding home finally far away
From the brackish waters of faint tears.

I tried the end rhyme too but was not successful. Lol. Beautiful poetry

That is lovely :)

Thanks sire.

Thanks sire

Beautifully written! This poem truly touches the heart. It is deep, gripping and cleverly crafted.

This is beyond words. Amazing ♡

@tarazkp ...its my pleasure reading this.

when i am gone

You writing on this reminds me of Rory Feek who was confronted with having to say goodbye to his beloved wife, Joey. He composed a special song to remember her by after she has gone.
And that song he titled it WHEN I AM GONE

I so much appreciate the poetry, keep up the good work and i am expecting to see more of this

I will do some googling to have a read :)

All is well

That's a really good poem man @tarazkp.
Keep up the good work, i also like to make poems, but mostly in Italian, only made 3 or 4 in english for now.

One thing I felt was your tactile imsgeries of touch, this is naturally written and also filled with sweetness, wow

It's very lovely poetry. Thanks for sharing this.

Deep emotions you've injected here...
Your couplet style with their end rhymes are thrilling, gives a reason to read on.
Your refrain "When I am gone" is as emotionally gripping as it is structurally placed at the perfect spaces.
We, @poeticnest would love to read more from you. Deep poets like yourself are rare. Do follow us as we will follow your every post.
Good poetry.
(P.S. this kind of poetry outta be read at least twice to get to understand the hidden truth between each couplet.)

When I am gone, nothing will be the same.

Nice poem...totally stunned by your work...keep going ..I wish you to make nice posts like this..

death leaves a headache no one can heal but love leaves a memory no one can steal,but eventually shall everyone return to the place they were first found
Great teaching and exciting poem @tarazkp
Keep it up 👏👐

Am so in love with the picture it really speaks of absence

Life is vanity , death is inevitable, we came with nothing and we are going with nothing, let us touch life's and when we are gone, we live on as a legend...

Very Heart touching ...
I loved the below lines the most :
To live a full life is to embrace the will
Look into the dark and move further still
Be shouldered by those kneeling or tall
Walk fast, run slow, tumble and crawl
All destinations lead onto the pointed

muchas gracias @tarazkp siempre me pregunto y reflexiono sobre como sera después que ya no estemos, tu poema me hizo recordar sobre muchos pensamientos efímeros, cuando nos hayamos ido quedaremos en las memorias de algunos, en fotografías que el tiempo ira marchitando, todo mantendrá su curso, todo seguirá igual sin nosotros. saludos

Very much enjoyed your poem!
Didn't know what to say so I made Haiku versions of your stanzas for fun!

Memories fading
At peace within the shadow
The final sharp death

Sacrificed so much
Those worldly riches denied
For that unknown shore

Petty words remain
No love, family, or friends
A grief-less passing

Those exquisite pains
Lifes loves and destiny's path
Driven by their Sins

Absolutely beautiful

"To live a full life is to embrace the will
Look into the dark and move further still"

These two lines just hit me the most. ❤❤ What I've understood is that, we should live life well according to the will of our Creator. Though life is not a comfortable ride all the time since we may go through darkness -- the problems and challenges, we just have to keep going because in darkness, there's always light. And in that light, our life is given another hope to be considered a life lived well before we'll finally be gone from this world.