Original poem by
Mr. Spacely
shared the joy with us
Through sad days, carried by the wind
we went together
On your wave, I raise my sails
and I see myself,
I'm forever yours
seems like it's hovering,
dreaming,
floating,
in a plate of the vastness of your spirit
the land is not home of mine anymore
through my body, the strange currents flow
like we are One,
Like two souls
My sense awakens...
Original poem by
Mr. Spacely
radovalo se sa nama
Tužne dane, vjetrom nošem
prolazili skupa
Valom tvojim, dižem jedra
vidim i sam,
zauvijek plovim
kao da lebdi,
sniva,
pluta,
u pjatu prostranstva duha tvoga
Kopno više nije moj dom
sada tijelom mojim plove čudne struje
kao da smo jedno,
kao dvije duše
osjet mi se budi...
by
Mr. Spacely
I will appreciate any feedback. Feel free to speak your mind, I'm open to all suggestions and critics, and I will take time to think about them seriously.
Once again, thanks for the support!
Excelente maestro! Great flow in it! Every new one of your poems I love even more! Keep it rollin'!
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Thanks bro for the support! I'm trying my best :D
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I especially loved this line. Such beautiful imagery. Another great poem, which flowed well.
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Thanks a lot <3... Seems that we all love to sail our dreams and see what's beyond!
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First off, lovely poem! I love the very last lines "While I sink, I have no fear
My sense awakens..."
It is relatable! I feel at home in the water, sinking deeper and feeling the cooling awakening effect. The same goes for love, I suppose.
Secondly, thanks for the link to the steemit school!
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Good point about love.. I didn't think about that, but I agree.. It's same, the more deeper we go the more it seems colder, but as our senses awaken we realize that we were cold :)
Thanks for stopping by and see you on our class in Steemit School ;)
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I love this bit right here. ♥
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Thanks!
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I just read your poem about the land, and now about the sea. This one is more impressive for me. Could be because I am really connected with the sea myself. I am a sailor through and through. But what I wanted to say is this so true. Sea really has a way to enchant you forever. When you once fall in love with the sea it is true. You sink in love with it "While I sink, I have no fear
My sense awakens..."
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Yeah somehow I too like this one more, and this one was way easier to write... It must be that we're sea people so we can connect more... The next poem is about air.. So let's see what we like more haha
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This is to inform on the behalf of @d-pend that your poetry is seen for 100 day challenge. Keep up the good work. :)
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No problemos amigos aayyyy! haha anyway, cool! :)
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Nikad u zivotu nisam citao poeziju, uvijek sam mislio da je bezveze (ocito pogresno), ali moram rec da je ovo prava umjetnost. Nisam mislio da cu ikad osjetiti nesto citajuci 'samo' rijeci na papiru, ali bio sam u krivu. Pravi si umjetnik...
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Hehe hvala, ja samo pišem a srce je umjetnik :)
A nisan ni ja mislia da cu pisat poeziju pa evo me, Steemit je luda platforma :D
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Hahaha stvarno je...nema sta
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