In this moment
My heart skips a beat
My chest closes down
My bloody red cheeks
I can feel the heat
A thrilling expression
Of a miraculous progression
Finally out of the friend-zone
At this moment I'm heart attack prone
A new adventure
With the one most desired
She's a visual pleasure
With a charm unable to acquire
A thought that brings my insecurities
To the point where I ask for assurity
I need to know what she's thinking
Before our ship starts sinking
Her words are all I want to hear
She's left me at the pear
I wish I could ask why
My hearts died
Years gone by she still in the back of my mind
I just want to forget our time
I've seen her around
She looks down
She is experiencing heart ache
My soul trembles like an earth quake
She'll be my friend
Hopefully that won't end
I promise never to give her reason
To commit to her and never commit treason
I'll be by her side through her pain
I won't allow her to mess with my brain
She had her chance
We sang our final song
And danced our last dance
I'll just enjoy the moment
While she's here in my arm
Event though there's no commitment
I'll keep her safe from harm
By Ethan
2017/06/22
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XD dating naked what an experience
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nice one
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thank you :]
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This poem is amazing. My boyfriend (whom I sent this poem) totally agrees with some of the sentiments you have expressed - the friendzone part. This part especially: "She'll be my friend
Hopefully that won't end" - Even though people might fall apart in the romantic sense, they should never ever stop being friends because of that.
I have also recently written a poem: https://steemit.com/poetry/@wordsmith01/poem-freedom - do check it out if you get a chance.
Upvoted and Followed :)
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I'll check it out :D most guys have been through this ;) unless they are assholes cause then it's the other way round.
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Thank you for the upvotes - really means a lot :) and that's so true haha!
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Dont worry... Times wounds all heals. Check out my poetry blog I just posted if you get a min. Good job, Steem on !!
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Will do! Anything for a fellow poet :] I like your jumble ;)
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Much obliged my new friend, I will continue to check up on your posts. Be well
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Same to you :D
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The moment in your life when your whole world stops for LOVE. :)
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It's the best and worst experience anyone can go through
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meh, not a huge fan tbh
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I like the pun :D but that's how poetry is, you either like it or not. The authors usually don't care if people think of it negatively, It's an expression of emotion that is therapeutic :)
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After all I lived, this is a dream coming true to me!
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:D I'm glad
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Another very deep moment shared by you. At first it gave me a sense of love then loss and hurt and then a profound realization that such experiences teach us to learn from it and move forward. But the most important thing is experiencing the growth, acceptance, forgiveness of the past and building upon it so that your can appreciate the now. It is also important to experience that moment of love. You are certainly a very, very deep person for one so young. Amazing!......Cabbagepatch
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As always your comments leave me speechless @cabbagepatch , I tried out a new style today and it proved pretty effective :) I'm glad I could share such an experience and that it carried across as well as it did ^-^
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As I said before, you really are a very special person with a gift of internal depth and realism. I can sense your wisdom, struggles and beauty. Keep on this path of growth!!!...... ;)
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Thank you! I hope to continue down this path and share many more :]
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this is so good! haha im sending it to my brother because he's "out of the friendzone" with his girlfriend haha x
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:D Another bro out the zone give him my best wishes XD
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hahah i know right, no one knew it was possible, thanks will do!
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☺ It occurs from time to time XD. Hope you have a good day further :)
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I am not that much into love poems, though I did experiment with them myself lately. However, this might be one of the best ones I ever seen!
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Thank you! I don't enjoy them much either, but if it's from the heart it comes out well, experience is the best source for poems :)
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thank you for sharing
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My pleasure :)
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MY HEARTS DIED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I'm sorry man :,| I wish I could help. women are complicated beings, they have so much control over us. They dont realize what simple words can do to us and it sucks...
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@xxsenpaixsamaxx :'
THAT HURTS
https://steemit.com/poetry/@anejosua/don-t-fall-in-love-if-you-don-t-want-to-get-hurt
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Well ... you know what ? .. She is a B*tch !
I am pretty sure with poetry skills like this you will find a better suiting mate soon :)
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XD Thanks man, this brightened my day :D
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Nice, bruh!
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Thank you :D
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Urwell :)
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I love it keep up the good work!
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Thank you! I will
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Great read! Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Thank you :)
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A heart touching poem. I liked it,looking forward to read another
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Thank you :D
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You might enjoy this post: https://steemit.com/life/@kaylinart/how-video-games-boost-productivity
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Nice
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You are good creating a poem, but you need to control your symbols, figure of speech, and jumping over and over again with the same thought that leads to being stagnant at the same "in the moment" thing that leads to a loop. I'm sharing you what I see in your poem. There are a lot of redundancy, repeating the same feeling... Use the words wisely and precise, lean and accurate.
I'd like to share a stanza according to the title of the poem.
A rousing aroma of her soul I feel her beat with heat,
A thrilling progression lying a heartfelt stroke,
An adventure desired with visual pleasure,
her thoughts I could hear, a wishful thinking.
well, it's just me... I'm only using the words that has impact upon reading. HOOK us up with your first line that will read for more and the desire to even know more the character you have created...
My two cents...
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Thanks much apreciated, but as Ive mentioned in the other comment most of it has a purpose, I'm not writing a poem persay I'm writing a story in the form of a poem, it's also redundant because the particular person has messed me around a couple times, I am still new to the whole poetry thing but with the advise you've given me my content should get better.
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nice Post, im new here. could somebody follow my Storys @nelke2010
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I'll check it out :D
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Congratulations @xxsenpaixsamaxx
You took 91 place in my Top 100 of posts
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