Poem / What I want

in poetry •  7 years ago  (edited)

What I want


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I want to hold you in my arms.
I want to keep you safe from all harm.
I want to be the person you look to.
When you’re not sure what to do.

I want to be the person to guide you.
I want to be the one standing beside you.
I want to be the one you call.
I want to be the one to catch you when you fall.
I want to be the one that will stand behind you through it all.

I don’t mind waiting a while.
If it means that every day I get to see you smile.
I want you to get these “children” out of your system.
I want you to hurt, I want you to bleed,
I want to be the one you’ll need.

I don’t want to lose you to some random jerk.
Just because he’s better looking under his shirt.
I want you to experiment with what you like.
So that you can decide if I’m your type.

I’m not going to be the one to make you wait.
I’ll still take you out on dates.
You might not be perfect, but you’re perfect for me.
I might not suit your criteria, but next to you is where I wanna be.

By Ethan
2018/01/16

P.S. I know the image has a spelling error in it, but it was the most relatable...

Note: If there are any spelling errors or things you disagree with, I would appreciate it if you let me know :)

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still astounded by what is created when your pen meets the paper

Simple poetry always triumph. I love the fact that it's easy to read and understand.

However, could you explain this: "I want you to hurt, I want you to bleed"

Are you referring to childbirth? (That's in relation to the previous line)

Plus, mind checking me out? I write simple poems too

By children I meant the immature or asshole men that she would go out with. I want her to experience everything and realize that I would give her the world.

This is one of the litest piece i read today

Nice piece of poetry it is good to be more handsome a friend to someone always being there for that person

Yeah I did enjoy it. You are a gift. Thanks.

Love it! I can feel the love in every lines. Keep inspiring. :)

  ·  7 years ago (edited)

This is beautiful Senpai! You have a powerful way with words that you were able to express a lot of emotions in a single piece. The poem defines a real gentleman. True love waits, after all. Loved it! ❤❤❤

Very good.
Upvoted & resteemed.

You should use the poem lyrics for a rap or r&b song. The words are simple and powerful. Keep up the good work!

thanks your post!

what a spirit you have just amazing..:)
Love your spelling errors XD
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Wow amazing poetry I did enjoy it

Nice piece.
Though what I want and what I get are becoming broadly different of late

great!!!! full of personality and brilliance! 👍🏽

This is great. Though it seems you are capable of greater things.

I’m not going to be the one to make you wait.

Heck, this is one of the most simple and awesome promises ever. :)

Me again - I guess you'll soon start groaning when you see my comment is in your post. Keep at it, you will be amazed at how you'll have changed when you look back years from now.
:)

Thank you, I appreciate criticism :D it takes time and I try to learn from it. I had another writer give me some tips, I didn't enjoy them much but took them anyway, One being the full stops at the end of complete sentences although I see I used the full stops incorrectly a few times here... I will edit :D

The best way to learn is from reading good poets. All rules can be set aside for creating the imagery or emotions or the flow we want, but even that must follow some kind of rule, even if it is a rule we make up.

Thank you for sharing your poem, I will keep a lookout​ for more of your work. God bless x

Excellent wishlist. Hope you achieve it all.

i like the "I want you to hurt, I want you to bleed" part...it shows how twisted human beings can be....even tho you want to protect her from all harm....a part of you wants the harm to come her way.... because you want to be the one she calls when she's in need