My entry for week #22. I've checked out a few submissions, and man, peeps are stepping up their games. It's beautiful to see the hip hop community on here alive and well. Shoutout to @rondonson once more for putting us all on!
Got my eye on the prize
The journey sits as the destination
Gotta question
Then why the hell I’m still waiting
World upon a precipice
Could be in it’s last gasps
In the tiny hands
Of a tiny man
He’s Here today
And gone tomorrow
Trade you in for his greed, leave you with the sorrow
And when you come around Not a dollar left to borrow
Yet the angry orange man ---
Doesn’t fully grasp
Were about hit some shit that you couldnt bully past
Mr tweetie pie fingers tawt he thaw puddy tat
This is on some nuclear not even talking pussy grabs
Living in a movie, it’s obvious, its’ poorly cast…
I got a plan of I’mma put mine on blast.
I’mma educate and elevate young minds
I’mma plant a seed, grow a tree
And see The roots intertwine
A battle for the ages --- waged when worlds collide
He pushes politicking thinking conquer and divide
Ill conceived feel defeat - the moment we arrive
A revolution unified --- moving in sync.
Now thats zero to a hundred fusing real quick.
A revolution unified --- moving in sync.
Now that’s zero to a hundred fusing real quick.
"Mr tweetie pie fingers tawt he thaw puddy tat
This is on some nuclear not even talking pussy grabs"
YOOO... This was a dope couplet my man. Really liked it.
Your content was dope, your flow was cool, there were a couple little small parts where you would pause or drag out a word longer than you should've, I would've just found another syllable or two to add to the bar to keep the flow going, but that's just me. The delivery was cool, but with a verse like this, you gotta really give it that fierce primal growl delivery, you know? Like you want to destroy the mic, just want to rip it to shreds.
Dope verse dude, really enjoyed it!
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Yoooo. Thanks for the listen and the feedback! That's funny, there's a couple lines in there that I actually took out some lines cause I thought it was too busy and decided to go with not as much filled in there. But I may just go back and put those back in and try it that way. The way you put it about ripping the mic, I should just go in all the way. Thanks brotha man!
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"He pushes politicking thinking conquer and divide
Ill conceived feel defeat - the moment we arrive".. Dooooope!! And did you already edit this video?? I feel a beast emerging!! This felt a little more grimmy than my soul glo brotha.. nonetheless this was real cool!!
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I did. I had more written but cut it down for the minute time limit. The beat brought it out a little more, and I try keeping the styles diversified if possible. Thanks for the love!
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