RE: Short story "Here IT comes" (English audioversion and text)

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Short story "Here IT comes" (English audioversion and text)

in scifi •  3 years ago  (edited)

Hi,

The formatting makes it a bit difficult to read. It would be nice if you'd separate each section of direct speech by a space. In addition, separate the paragraphs from each other giving them extra space as well. You can still edit the text and do it. For example...

But Rebecca lost a close friend and a loved one to it. She sighed, turned away, and called the children.

«All right. Let’s go! Let’s go, kids. You’ve looked at the houses, and now it’s time to go back! Let’s go!»

She had two wonderful kids, a boy, and a girl. Her husband was a spacecraft pilot and now was on a mission. Life went on. Her children would live in a new world, which possibly would be affected by the strange tragedy of «Elon Musk».

Also, there are quite a number of punctuation errors. If you want I will send you the corrected version.

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