It does make sense :)

Focus on your slide timing as well. Your times are good right now, but some people read a little slower so if you add more text on a page be sure to increase the slide time.

Add a question in there too, like "Are you making money on steemit.com yet?" lol :D
It's always good to get a question in someones head when marketing. Make the question about the website that has the answer ;)