Omega Crossing
Prelude
Keth cautiously walked down the narrow aisle. Sets of bench style seats ran the length of the metal encased cart. A row of metal framed windows lined each wall. He stooped down and peered out the broken windows, at the rubble scattered about the streets of the long abandoned city. It was always strange to him, to think that the ancients once found solace in these formed stone and iron fortresses. More like prisons he always thought. Judging by the number of dwellings, thousands upon thousands must have lived in such close proximity to one another. The fighting must have been ceaseless. He never understood how they had food for so many with nearly all the ground being covered by this cursed formed stone. How does one make food without farms? Even the most gifted mages needed soil to drain nutrients from. This was, but one of the many mysteries forgotten by time of the seemingly great ancients.
Keth’s thoughts came to a sudden halt when he sensed movement from the corner of his eye. He ducked between a set of seats, stopped breathing and focused his sense. Closing his eyes, he broke full contact with his fleshly senses and began to take in his surroundings with his spirit sense.
The naked eye would show that his surroundings was more or less a wasteland of formed stone, metal, and other synthetic materials. His spirit-sight saw a different world. Looking down at his own body, it was beaming with a brilliant blue aura. The disparity between his body and it’s monochrome synthetic surroundings was absolute. Beneath the formed stone road, the soil was glowing with all shades of browns, blues, and greens. They were beaming with life and possibility. Every patch of moss, every plant that forced it’s way through the stone to reach the light was clearly visible. It would seem that life will eventually overcome even the graveyards of the ancients.
Momentary distracted by the beauty of his surroundings, Keth regained focus and began to seek out the disturbance. Tracing up the road past the many long abandoned metal carts and into a cave entrance of one of the buildings about one hundred paces from his body, almost to the limit of his spirit sense, he saw the dim white glow of a rabbit. It was nibbling on a patch of glowing pink flowers that had pushed it’s way through the formed stone ground at the cave entrance. Keth could see the pink petals being chewed in it’s mouth and the subsequent journey to it’s stomach where it faded away into the general white glow of the rabbits body.
The image collapsed and he was snapped back into his body as his stomach ached with hunger. It had been close to a week since he last ate meat. He had been surviving mostly off of moss and weeds he had transfigured to vegetables. This was a life saving gift taught to him by his grandfather just prior to his passing.
Keth stood up and slowly exited the long faded yellow cart which he had been his hiding place. After grabbing his bow and an arrow from their holder on his back. Notching the arrow, he pulled back on the string and held his breath and reached out partially with his spirit-sense. He reacquired the rabbit and let the arrow fly. Having released the string, he now fully entered his spirit sense.
While in his spirit-sense, time reacted differently to Keth than in his fleshly senses. At times it would slow down. Minutes could become hours and likewise, hours could become minutes. He didn’t really understand this gift of his and only had minimal instructions from his grandfather. It was on his twenty second name day when it first manifested. That day was the most exciting and terrifying day of his life. A re-birthing of sorts…
PS Remember don't hate me, I'mjustsaying.
This is the prelude to my Science fiction, Fantasy novel. I would love to continue to complete this work here on Steemit. I have nearly completed the first chapter it just needs to be polished up before I can post. If any of you find this work of value and would like to help support me in this journey I will be attempting, to leave a comment in this post each week until I have posted the next post. If you are so inclined and this post is past 7 days your welcome to upvote it and support this creation.
I welcome peoples feedback on my writing. The story is not yet set in stone, parts have been revealed to me, but most of it I will have to witness as I write. Your feedback could influence the journey our hero must take. I get inspiration from all over. Thank you for your time and support.
-K
I like this. Even if it is a prelude it is a pretty good opening. Keep going, man. And never give up on writing.
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I think you should write it because YOU want too. I would read more, It was starting to draw me in, your sentence structure is kinda messed up in places but no biggie , editor can fix that. Do what you LOVE they say.
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Oh I will write it regardless, it's just all a matter of time allocation in the present. Yeah I really need the help of a good editor. Once I start seeing what I am doing wrong I can try to correct it going forward. Thanks for your input. Once I get chapter one posted it will become more clear if people will be interested.
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I mean, I can help edit if you want.
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I got 2 more chapters if you want to check them out.
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I just saw this, I am so tired from fast I will have to wait, thanks and I will read soon for sure!
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Great ... Go through my blog and vote. I already vote you regards
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I would assume that others have tried this, I don't know. But a Steemit crowd funded book seems like a good idea to me. I wanted to get some cover art but I have not created an original piece yet. Hopefully I will have something by the time chapter one is ready to post.
Please consider resteeming, I would love to dedicate more time to writing this, and it would be much easier finding motivation if I could see that people are wanting it and even willing to throw a cent, a dollar, or a Benjamin my way.
Thanks Steemians for your support.
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Honestly, this is better than posting it on any other site. You'll gain more readers this way, trust me.
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Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice, good setup. Look forward to seeing more.
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I'm not a very skilled "technical" writer. My grammar needs work. I'm a $#!tty speller. But my imagination, love of creating, and desire for story telling just might be enough. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement.
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The imagination is the key. Grammar and spelling can be largely corrected by Word (just see my stuff). Creation is not always technical. just ask Andi Warhol- from stacking soup cans in Safeway to....oh wait that was my mate George Warhol.. Never mind, you catch my drift, that stuff was crap anyway.
The point is...
You have the very best ingredient, the only one actually. The rest can be learnt or sorted for you. I like to think I have imagination. the way I see it is I'll provide human, let programs sweat the small stuff.
(by the way, releasing a few pages at a time may just build a following anyway, and make consistency and daily blogs.)
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I don't know that with my schedule I would be able to pull off a few pages a day but prob, a few pages, a few times a week. I know it would be more enjoyable to read a whole chapter, at a time. That being said if it was weeks between them that would not exactly bring in the crowds.
There you go throwing around that good advice again.
It's tricky because the first chapter is sorta just setting up the stage. But I think you may be onto something. I need to make some sorta cover art. I'm not a good enough painter to be able to make a cool as sci-fi landscape. Lol just having flashes of old 80's book/movie covers.
You know like Fabio holding a Gauss rifle, with a scantly dressed dame at his feet, holding her hand in the air whilst staring into space. Halo'd by nuclear explosion illuminating the background.
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