Long Story | The Grumpy Dwarf

zaxan (64) in steemmonsters • 6 years ago (edited)

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6 years ago by zaxan (64)

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cjturtleman (46) · 6 years ago

I just bought a grumpy dwarf!

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wisejg (58) · 6 years ago

I admit that at first I thought it was long. but I decided to read it. I feeling that I was seeing legolas and the dwarf. of the movie "Lord of the Ring" although in any case it would be more to the relationship between the elf and the dwarf in "The Hobbit"

great imagination finishing everything and I hope that you write another adventure ... that matter of the spirits can not be left that short

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zaxan (64) · 6 years ago

I've never seen the Lord of the Rings complete D: But it's ok, it's the first reference in the world for magic kindowns and elf, and orc, and all those things.

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zaxan (64) · 6 years ago

ty @steemgg team ♥

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curie (76) · 6 years ago

Hi zaxan,

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zaxan (64) · 6 years ago

thanks for the supp <3

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clove71 (72) · 6 years ago

Awesome story!!!
Lyanna Natura (420px, 25fps).gif

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zaxan (64) · 6 years ago

thanks clove! really appreciate ♥

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oliviackl (53) · 6 years ago

@zaxan, wow, i love your story. Although it a bit long but it won't stop me read until it finished. I love how you painted Duno character, from a gold miner into a hero to fight against Zintar to save the human kind.
With the lost of his only friend Lyanna, it trigger his revenge, in the revenge journey he met another friend, Alena.

Your story caught me in surprise when he met the killer, and it turned out that his body was posses by Zintar. And the emerge of Lyanna as a guardian angle. Your story gave me surprise after another surprise.

After read your Feeling the cinema, I didn't know that you are a fiction writer as well.

Took you how long to finish this story?

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zaxan (64) · 6 years ago

Thank you for your words olivia!
I spent an entire day writing and seeing how to get along with the story. At first I didn't know what to do and ended up listening to epic music until I came up with an idea.

After at least an hour I found the music that inspired me and began to write patches, then paragraphs, then combinations until I came up with the final result. I had to check the steemmonsters website for a long time to find characters that would match what I wanted to convey.

Thanks again for appreciating my not so short story.

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oliviackl (53) · 6 years ago

Music sometimes can inspire people if we pay attention on what the singer want to share. Happy that you able found a music which inspired you with such a story.

Now i hope more steemmonsters and music could give you more inspiration to write more interesting stories.

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heavyb (25) · 6 years ago

dam good story!!! put me to shame keep up the good work😊

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zaxan (64) · 6 years ago

thanks heavyb!

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audreybits (59) · 6 years ago

This is so so goood! You have a way of getting someone immersed in your story and asking for more after each line, its such a nice one with a beautiful feeling. Though Duno was on a path for revenge, he found his purpose at the end... A better one!! Love for people who once hated him and the desire to protect them. Thank goodness Lyanna is back and as a guardian this time... Together with the elf, the all are gonna do amazing things...

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zaxan (64) · 6 years ago

thanks audrey! I will try to do more stories about steem monsters... and maybe more short lol

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audreybits (59) · 6 years ago

Hahahah! I liked this kind of short...😉

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wilhb81 (76) · 6 years ago

Love your storyline, it's very interesting indeed!

All the best @zaxan :D

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adamada (63) · 6 years ago

Welp, can't deny that I was hesitant to bother with reading the story. I mean, it's really really long. But I know what it's like to have your effort not being recognized after putting in some work on it.

The story is nice, follows the simple heroes journey and offers the occasional plot twists. But I think it needs a bit more work on the pacing. I love long stories, it's just that I like it with more consistency and tension building. All in all, you did good here :D

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arrozymangophoto (70) · 6 years ago

you've made me cry, not for criticizing the readings I've read lately but they're colder, you've given it the Latin heat. i love the lines of intensity that impregnate the story, the revenge in Duno's mind and the appearance of the elf is for me the best part.

by the way I miss you :( we are going to see we are going to see we are going to see (8) :D

thank you for sharing your creation, very ingenious.

Greetings dear friend

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jocqua (60) · 6 years ago

What an awesome story! I love that you've taken this Steem Monsters game and what looks like a card from it to inspire a creative story around one of the characters. I think it's a fantastic idea! I studied writing in school and I was always told to full detail your character, even outside the world you were writing about. By giving them a full description you really define the character for yourself and that makes it easier to imagine how they would react or live in the world you're creating. It seems to have worked very well for you because you did such a nice job writing about Mr. Duno and his love for Lyanna.

I love that after all of his blinding anger he was able to see past it and commit to a bigger cause, protecting even those who had treated him so badly. You've built a good lesson in there.

Thanks so much for sharing! I didn't mind the length at all and I enjoyed reading your story. Cheers!

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blockurator (65) · 6 years ago

I see why you won. This is an excellent story, a great narrative. You'd make a very good addition to the Speculative Fiction Writers of Steemit community. I hope you'll join us.

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