link to part 2 of The Mausoleum and any suggestions and or directions by our mentor @michelle.gent in the comment section of part 2.
Part 3 - The Mausoleum
On this cold and windy day in an old house near the cemetery, we find Darius.
He is gathering his strength to rise out of bed. He didn’t want to get up. Besides, why should he in his current condition?
There isn’t even a name for it. Only the Orb will help – he’d seen this condition before but only in others.
The changing of his features the restrictions in the movement of his body.
Darius is still a brilliant man he will have to call on all his knowledge and training.
Only he alone knows the use of the orb and soon he will prove it. This is what keeps him in town.
There are so many better things he could be doing once he is back to his old self.
Pulling himself up he sits stiffly on the side of the bed, using his hands to help swing his legs over so they barely touch the floor. Being on this planet takes it toll on even the strongest of his people.
Darius stretches his arms and says out loud, “So her name is Victoria.
She needs my help and she doesn’t know it yet.”
Original writing by @rebeccabe
Original photographs using Canon T6
Thank you for taking this journey with me.
@rebeccabe
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I assume you meant "takes its toll"
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lol thanks I will fix it.
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Oh now this is going in a direction I'd not expected.
I'll have a think and then another read of it.
Interplanetary beings... cool!
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Let me have my best writers here.
I was also thinking that the next thing would be to read. Now it is going to be in the hope.
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Darius a brave man has done alot and I'm ashamed of his current situation as he has seen the situation but only in other, now that he is expecting that on his own, this must be painful for him, restrictions in body is really pain in the ass, you can't do anything but see, even can't go for toilet... GET WELL SOON Darius...
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be careful you may need his help one day.
Great comment!
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God forbid, i don't want to get involved in such tings..
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you are protected by your good heart
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Loved to read this part, keep posting, wating for part 4
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thank you..what did you love about it?
We'll see what @michelle.gent says, I put what I had to see where I am at. Lol
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Courage of Darius
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nice one dear, great writing style, with an amazing photography.
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thank you so much @yassinof
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Dear @rebeccabe i actually love the plot.You description on Darius' condition was fantastic.I don't know if you have planed it this way but it feels like a dark story-which i love- i m starting getting attached to the characters.Especially Victoria.Seems determined>Thumbs up for your try
PS i just saw this tag and i ll just have to check it.Is it ok if i try or should i ask @michelle.gent?You kinda know my writing so i d love to hear your opinion
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you need to check and see if @michelle.gent is accepting new people I would definitely recommend you @mindtrap
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I praticaly can relate to what Darius is presently going through.
Once, a story was told of a professor, a radiologist, who came down with cancer but on realisation, irradiated himself to death in frustration.
with the same radiation with which he treated people, he killed himsef
In between... That was another good piece from you. @michelle would really be impressed.
Kudos!
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thank you for your comment .. the professor sounds as if he was desperate ... sorry to hear he died
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He was depressed actually.
I did not know him personally though.
Thanks a lot
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Darius got out from his bed..
Now i shoud die :p
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why should you die?
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A strange man having answers to the quest of a strong willed woman, this story sure gets better.
Am kinda liking the suspense though its a scary one but it pulls one in to read.
Great episodes so far @rebeccabe
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thank you for your comment .. good to know that it is moving along
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Darius is a stalwart man. She will definitely need his help. Here's the one who she will need. Look forward to part 4
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thanks for the great comment
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You are an example for budding writers...Amazing write up.Really well narrated..U got the midas touch
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thanks for sure a beautiful comment
I know I am beginning to understand more about storytelling through @michelle.gent than ever before
I almost gave up lol but then Darius gave me his part so we will see what happens
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wow very nice. this is very intersting & heart touching story. when i am reading this story that time i lost my self & feel Darius charecter. fablous one. Thank You.
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excellent so glad.. thank you
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You are most welcome for my heart. now i am a big fan of you.
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She definitely does need his help and what better man than Darius.
He seems like a strong one.
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yes strength comes from within when needed
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But why did Darius extend her hand and say that her name is Victoria? The rest of the story would be better if you could read. I know the smell of a mystery. but well writing. carry on.
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I had to reread what you wrote several times. You need to read the first parts of the story.
Darius is a man, a new character introduced and he is referring to Victoria from part 1 and part 2 of the story.
Click the part 2 link and you will see. Thanks for reading this one. :)
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Thank you so much for helping me understand. You're right, I do not know the previous parts. I have seen the first and second parts.
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what a nice post it is..i like it..so thanks for sharing with us...keep it up..
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you will need to interact more...with your rep score I see you are new. Nice post doesn't work. trying to help you. what makes it nice?
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N its so good to see you are encouraging people to talk about the topic.. Grounded you are
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thanks
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