I was on a plain, sunny and maybe hot, because I dont remember a weather sensation, but I do remember that it seemed like home ... although it definitely was not.
I went to a house on the block with a friend and my girl dog, whom I usually see a couple of times a year, because I live 24 hours away from my dog and my family.
We are accustomed to walking with her without a rope and she walks freely but always faithful, never leaving us. For a moment, she was distracted and ended up losing herself. When I realized she was not there, my heart quickened, I felt the pressure of the universe as if they were dementors.
There the anguish began, I looked for it and searched, I thought I would lose it forever. The hours passed and I kept looking, it was many blocks that I walked with my friend. I was breaking, almost given up, my eyes began to get wet when I heard some dogs plowing down the other street, I followed them and a little away from them, she was feeling alone.
She looked to the sides searching for something, with eyes of fear and concern. No one who does not love their pet can understand, how moving it can be to see that friend go through a sadness and my heart went out through my mouth, I called and yelled. Sure I was looking for the same time, his face changed to a face so beautiful and inexplicable never seen.
He started running with his tongue out now, as if he were smiling. We both ran towards each other until I hugged her while she licked my face and I cried with joy, because I was there, because I did not lose her, I loved her and I had her.
I love the personal experience you here bring to life. Some of your grammar though has error, and this disrupt the flow of your story.
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For such a brief narrative, you need to make sure every word counts, every sentence. Do away with words and sentences that add nothing specific or necessary to the story.
Otherwise, thanks for sharing what seems a personal experience. You prove that story telling is indeed about experiences, either ours or of others, but always about experiences. I share the same mind. So thanks
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Thanks for the correction, it is always good that someone can correct you and in that way learn every day. regards!
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You are welcome. To LEARN that is the key word. I agree. And consistent to that, I wish people could actually read whatever stories, narratives....others write, and care enough to share in the experience of the characters, real or created, of the stories, narratives, poems that have been written about, rather than indiscriminately just posting 'nice story' and all those kind of comments without even reading. Delving deep in to the story or narrative, and sharing in it, in the experience of its characters, in the construct of its moral, of its scenes.....i think that is what will help build a true community. I write short stories myself, and poems....and in them i try to bring to life experiences, personal and foreign, Worldly and Godly. You know what my pleasure is, or at least what i am looking forward to? Its is to actually be read, but more than that, for readers to share in the experience of my characters, to understand, and appreciate the moral and/or theme of my story and poem respectively. And to learn from it (them). Overall, to engage. My love of Steemit is premised on this. Otherwise, you have a lot to learn. And i have a lot to learn. We all do. Look forward to more 'writings' from you
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