[Short Story] The Land Underground

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Gentle folk, children, come gather round. I’ll tell you the tale of the land underground.
“What? A land underground? Do you know how you sound?” No doubt like the crazy old man of the town!

Yet it’s real as the eyebrows you raise at me now, as real as the dubious look on your face. It isn’t a vision, a myth or a ruse, but by my own blood, it’s an actual place.

Perhaps you have ventured once into the dark. Exploring some cavern, perhaps for a lark. But nary did you stay any longer than that, driven back to the sun by a shadow, or bat.

I tell you that if you’d continued below, you’d come across trees, rivers, mountains and snow. The darkness and rock walls give way to the light, a cavern so massive the roof’s beyond sight.

Where’s the light come from? Nobody knows. Nor, when night comes, do they know where it goes. In truth, though you doubt me, there’s an endless frontier, to be conquered by men whose hearts beat without fear.

You won’t be the first, nor will you be last. Heretics, exiled, or iconoclast. Banished from the surface world of sun, wind and sound, they venture below, to the land underground.

Overthrown kings, warlords or chiefs. At one time a hideout for assassins and thieves. All tried to lay claim to what’s under our feet. ‘Til the natives emerged, to feast on fresh meat.

The ruins of castles and forts testify to the desperate battles of eras gone by. One after the next, empires rose and fell, destroyed by unspeakable creatures from Hell.

They wait ‘till you’ve settled, invested it all. Committed yourself, thrown your hat o’er the wall. That way you won’t run, but instead stay and fight what’s been watching from shadows, beyond reach of the light.

This is how they feed. They have no need to hunt. Prey comes to them, an ingenious stunt. Driven by greed, and dreams of return, that the empire they’ll forge might one day surface to burn, rape and pillage the kingdom which banished them there, but that dream before long turns into a nightmare.

As soon as they’re settled, there’s no need to pretend, no need to hide, no disbelief to suspend. Gracefully, they emerge from the walls. Silently crawling through chambers and halls. Shifting their shape while your back is turned. Just the way to stalk humans, their ancestors learned.

There is no free land. Nowhere left you can go. No freedom from tyrants, above or below. Lest you ignore my warnings and set off for the cave, know that the land underground is a grave. Containing the corpses of millions of men, but also of kingdoms they failed to defend.

The ones waiting there I am sure will not starve. No shortage of men more ambitious than smart, will continue to feed them thanks in large part to man’s unjustified but unwavering perception that despite all who’ve died trying, he’ll be the exception.

So despite the grand tales and the dreams they inspire, balance that against everything dire I’ve told you about what waits to be found, by the fools who would seek out the land underground.


The End.

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I actually imagined this as a children's book with illustrations while I was reading it.

Me too! I still sort of want to turn it into one someday.

Thats the truth though...

Really liked the rhyming phrases and it was so picturesque. Following you, looking forward to more stories!

it's like reading George rr martin :D i always enjoy fantasy with touch of darkness :D great work

When I was reading an end of the story, I had a feeling that vampires are somehow related to it. I re-read it, but the beginning was more general. I guess I missed a point :) but still, ​I like to think that it is about vampires.

Only men get eaten? Do you just mean humankind? I can't tell if this is an allegory, and if so, what it's drawing allusions to. I have guesses and some of them make me glad, and some make me sad.

I think I will reserve the right to be maddeningly cryptic about it. (Although really, no symbolism is intended, it's just a fun rhyming story.)

Excellent! I'm especially glad for unintentional symbolism.

interesting story :o

Nice Story

Reality hits hard

Excellent and so captivating compared to the mundane day to day BS that surrounds us all..................... enjoyed!

@alexbeyman,
It's not just a story, it has a rhythm! Like an untold story comes through winds... something magical... Actually that would be a great work! A brilliant effort and worked perfect!

Cheers~

nice One so crude

its a very helpful post, thank you'''
Thanks for sharing this..upvoted..

There's always some element of darkness in everything you write. And boy do I enjoy reading it :D

Hey, I wanted to ask you: @rhondak, my very good friend and one of our chief editors at the Fiction Workshop, wanted to curate your work through the Steemit Fiction Trail. Do you mind if she does? Also, I wanted to know if you'd be willing to feature on the Fictioneers Webcast at some point. You're one of the most prolific writers here, and I'd love to have you on.

I guess that's fine. Do I have to do anything?

For the curation? No, not at all. We just don't want to link to or mention your stories without your permission :)

To be on the show, you'd have to log into Discord and access the PALnet server. If you're familiar with Discord, it's a pretty easy thing. I can give you the server link. The show is hosted from 5 - 7pm CST.

Oh, I don't really care to be on any show. I'm sort of pressed for time lately as I'm back up to 4 items per day and dealing with beaurocratic car stuff that's necessary before I can legally drive it. I've upvoted your post about Fictioneers Ep 5 though, you can count on my support.

Totally understand. We appreciate the support! Hope you get your car stuff resolved, my friend.

Wow, Thats a great..A brilliant effort and worked perfect!.I like your post.@alexbeyman

You paint a beautiful picture with every sentence you write. What an art!

Followed & upvoted.

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