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Post 8
Present
Khal opened the hangar door and stepped into the giant space that Dagr had made his home. He was working a small piece of white bone on his ancient bone-grinder. As Khal came closer, he realized that the small piece was actually a fairly large sword. Everything looked small in the hands of this massive being. At twenty eight feet high, Dagr was the largest and oldest of the remaining Argantuan. Khal waited at a respectful distance until Dagr had finished sharpening the weapon. A bone smith was about as honoured a position one could attain in Argantuan society. His every movement was an expression of profound knowledge, respect and commitment to his craft.
Dagr – “This represents the last piece of white bone large enough to be a sword, my friend.”
His voice was so deep and rumbling, it was sometimes difficult to understand. Fortunately, their growing familiarity helped considerably.
Khal – “At least our gambit was successful, no more stars have been attacked, which means they cannot replicate at the same rate and we’ve bought some time.”
Dagr – “Yes. But one more major engagement and they will know.”
He was right. What time they had bought had been expensive. The plasma charges required a large amount of powdered white bone and they had perhaps four more charges without the ability to make more.
The Void Seed were numerous, but the Alliance could still draw upon greater numbers, despite grievous loses. If the enemy thought the Alliance now had a weapon that could prevent them from replicating, that would certainly give them pause. Without reinforcements, a war of attrition would see the Alliance victorious. It did not appear that the Void Seed had been reinforced via the gateway. Why that should be, no-one knew. Perhaps the gateway had ceased to function properly?
Khal – “I think it is time to reconsider that mission to your homeworld.”
Dagr – “The Void Seed are swarming all over it for they know it is the origin of the white bone.”
Khal – “It is worth great risk.”
Dagr stands up from his sitting position at the bone grinder. He stretches his massive neck and arms.
Dagr – “Mmmmmm. I must admit. I yearn to visit the caverns. I fear some of my people may have been left behind in stasis. And there is a great, hidden store of ancient white bone….the legacy of our ancestors. It may have survived.”
Khal – “If there is any chance…..”
Dagr – “My horn grows thirsty for enemy blood. We shall proposition the Alliance counsel.”
The two massive beings, one blue and white, one black, leaders of the last of their people, lock arms in a silent promise.
20 Years ago
The Daxiste-agorian shuttle appeared from out of a clear blue sky. There was a collective gasp from many of the one thousand volunteers waiting to embark. Anna had been dropped of several weeks ago in order to report directly to the GAN Command and to oversee the final preparations for the volunteers. She could hardly believe the events of the last ten years. It was almost overwhelming to be responsible for so many people in a situation that was literally out of this world. But there were many with great burdens in this war and she would do what needed to be done. It helped a lot that Gary had been one of the first to volunteer and be accepted. His knowledge and calm assurance would be a valuable asset to every human.
One of the problems with finding the right volunteers had been the issue of longevity. The Daxiste-agorian genetic enhancements would extend a human lifespan by at least a factor of ten. So, assuming no violent interruption, they would live to at least a thousand years, maybe longer. Despite these realities, many people with families and friends had volunteered because, the way they saw it, there would be no-one if the Void Seed destroyed our sun. To their credit, it didn't sit well with many that their battles were being met by others and simply had to help in any way they could. It was inspiring.
Gary – “Here they come.”
He couldn’t keep the excitement from his voice. Anna smiled.
Anna – “Click has allocated several decks of a Daxiste-agorian research vessel for us. They’ve all been debriefed so once everyone is settled in, training will begin.”
Gary – “I can’t tell you how good I feel since the injection.”
Anna – “I know. It makes you feel invincible. It’s such a shame that we’re not even close.”
Gary – “At least the air on the ship won’t kill us!”
The shuttle landed in the marked zone and several doorways opened with ramps extending down from them. The humans began to board the alien ship on a desperate adventure that could very well be the end of them……or lead to the salvation of the universe.
Anna – “That’s everyone. Let’s go.”
Looks like I need to go back to the beginning of this story. Glad to have found your work this morning!
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I hope you enjoy the rest!
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Nice reading. Like it!
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Must resist temptation to read previous chapters while at work!
Will certainly be checking it out later though, this story looks awesome @benjojo
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Lol! Thank you so much.
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如果有中文版就好了:)
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Google translate said 'if there are enough Chinese version.' I'd love for the story to be translated, if that's what you are asking :)
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I should read the previous chapters, I'm confused...
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If there's anything I can do to help, just ask.
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wow amazing nice post you and cool
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:)) beaming, thank you kita!
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no problem sir. good luck
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How Void Seeds know about white bone source if they are not in contact with alliance?
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The Void Seed have encountered the Argantuans in the past. They destroyed their homeworld, their solar system and maintain a presence on their dead planet. The Argantuans with the alliance are the remnants of their people.
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Another great chapter! If it's not too much trouble, I do have one question about Argantuan bone. Since it is grown externally, can the bone be harvested from an Argantuan and eventually regrown or is the bone only collected after the Argantuan dies?
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It's no trouble at all. During an Argantuan's maturation phase, the bone grows out from their internal skeleton, through the skin (protrusions) and over the skin (plates.) The plates act to reinforce the skin in various places all over the body, but they do not interlock. The protrusions are in the form of spikes of various thicknesses that protrude from the shoulders and arms....the largest coming out of the forehead. The shoulder and arm spikes are quite short and are therefore cannot be made into the larger sword-type weapons. For that the larger internal bones must be used.
If a spike or plate is damaged before hibernation, it can be regrown/repaired. White bone that has been through the hibernation of a mature Argantuan cannot be regrown, however it is incredibly durable. Only a white bone-grinder, guided by the power of a Blodhur can shape mature bone.
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Thank you for the information. I'm thoroughly enjoying this story. Definitely some of the best writing I have found on Steemit.
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very good chapter as always, expected further description of the sword although not essential in the story, I like the swords
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The white bone of the Argantuans is ash-white and before it is worked upon by a smith, or Blodhur, has the appearance and texture of weathered stone. During the shaping of white bone, the Blodhur, provides a gift of blood to the weapon. This is because the bone continues to live even after the death of the Argantuan who grew it and after it's shaping. The effect is a matte white, marbled with the dark blue Argantuan blood. Every weapon is there fore unique. Over time, the bone dies and the blue marbling begins to crystalize. This only enhances the strength of the weapon.
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I enjoyed this chapter much :D
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wow! this part is very interesting. can't wait for next episode........
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ah! finally come the 8th part :)
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after reading all parts I can only say "your story is awesome".
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I'm curious about so many things now, mostly the time split and what happened to Anna in the time between that and Click finding Joshua. I'd infer that in Joshua's time, humanity seems to have failed to prevent the void seeds from coming to earth.
Also I think it would be a good idea to write the dialogue more traditionally (as opposed to the sort of play-style you're using) because it would give you more room to characterize without making your characters say things.
It would also be great if you could pair up with an illustrator so we could visualize some of these species better! Keep writing, I'm enjoying it.
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Thank you for this excellent feedback fungusmonk. I will give some thought to adjusting the style of dialogue. My only fear is that I'll not be able to cope with the additional volume of writing that may be required. It would almost certainly improve the ability of people to connect with the characters.
@gabosh has made a lovely illustration of a Ziff. Perhaps I could look into formalising something? maybe put up an SD reward for specific illustrations? I'll give it some thought.
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I don't think it would add too much inherently, just open up your options. Could you link me to that illustration? I'd love to see it.
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Sure, it's in the comments section of post 7.
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Awesome, thanks!
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Amazing Story !!!
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can't wait to know what will happen next ??
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This part is very interesting. Looking forward for next chapter.
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Thank you for the part 8. I enjoy it very much.
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best story .... please, give update regularly :)
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wow, cool story. thank u :-)
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your imagination is high :)
nice story :)
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Exciting Story !
There is a chance for you to be an established writer (specially in science fiction)
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Very interesting story. Glad it was recommended to me. Can't wait for the next post.
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I've been trying to a chance to read this installment all day -- glad I did @benjojo. Looks like we are gearing up for an epic battle -- can't to see the story unfold. CHEERS!
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What a lovely comment to wake up to! Gets me excited to write the next one ;))
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I just read it, very interesting part)
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It's been a while since i wasnt interested in the past, but now WOW, what happened to these humans??
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thumbs up :)
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nice story........I enjoyed much
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Enjoyed reading this part @benjojo
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It's becoming like a movie in my mind reading this:) Keep it up @benjojo this is really great!
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Nice chapter @benjojo
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Always pleasure to read)
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I like Anna so much!
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