I must have felt okay when I wrote this. It's a very okay poem. It's got political undertones, but under a sweet voice, like a Peter, Paul and Mary song.
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Morning Breath (There Was a Day)
The Singing Butler by Jack Vettriano. My friend Maddie introduced me to him a year ago today, and I've loved his work! Some of it gets pretty spicy though...
there was a day where
it wasn't too hot, but it wasn't too
cold either.
no one died and no one was born.
smiles graced the faces of curmudgeons and
frowns were held firm by jesters.
they all ate dinner when it was
fresh from the stove. fast food restaurants
closed because the economy allowed fathers
time to go home and cook for their spouses with
marinades and spices. they cracked books when
their families were apart and they
placed their thumbs between the pages when children
needed hugs or
playmates or
their handiwork seen. a painting,
a turkey or a
hand or an
abstract impressionist piece where their
peace was evident.
(those were rare and exceptional cases though.)
there was a night to compliment that day too.
it wasn't dark too soon, but
the light humbly bowed out when it was time to depart.
the children slept without dreams of tomorrows, their
youthful faces untouched by the bullets of the hateful. their
youthful bodies unmarked by the hand of
discipline or anger or angry discipline. a
fine line of gray stood out against fathers'
dark, short cut hair, and it was okay.
mothers gained ten pounds and
showed them off to their spouses, like
instead of self conscious,
instead of shamed for the night's dinner weight,
they loved each other fiercely, with
closed eyes,
loose mouths,
with quiet prayers or meditations; moments as solid as the pillows
under their heads and the
morning breath to come.
I am verklempt, @caleblailmusik! The imagery and sentiment of this poem are so powerful. I'm not well-versed in verse, but I do know this resonates with me, and makes me feel I entered a magical world where families become what families are meant to be.
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Awww, thank you @jayna! That means a lot!
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My favorite part... "The light humbly bowed out when it was time to depart."
Just so lovely.
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Aww, thank you! I’m glad you liked it :D
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This is remarkably optimistic @caleblailmusik. Not entirely crooked, except for the jesters holding onto frowns.
The rest is...pleasant. Thanks :)
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remarkably XD
I thought the jester with the frown was for the greater good too. Sometimes, after doing the same thing (i.e. um, jesting?) for so long, a change is a good thing, even if it's frowning. We all need self-expression sometimes :D
You're welcome! I'm glad you liked it!
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I understood and could relate! Good job.
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Thanks mama! <3
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Your writing, your writing, your writing, (no it's not a typo) all in my mind. causing me DNA explosions, how your verses flow like a freight train and spill over into each other and fall like dominoes with a purpose on their way to a conclusion. I love the way you tell stories in poetic prose. If you don't mind I would like to spotlight and curate this. You are in a class of your own. It's Just Awesome.!! I am a very creative soul but you just gave birth to something in me .....Thank You @caleblailmusik
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Wow! You’re too kind! I’m glad my poem awakened something in you! You’re very welcome! :D
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'Okay' seems pretty good to me! This has a really sweet pace, like the wrapping up of a fairy tale. Totally loved it.
I must say, though, that when I'm reading and have to make a pause, it's usually index that goes between the pages while the thumb goes to the cover. I just had a hard time picturing the thumb.
Oh, also, I can't get Puff the magic dragon out of my head now either. Thanks for that too.
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Oh, didn't know! It's always a thumb for me!
And I'm glad I could put some happiness in your day XD Peter, Paul and Mary is not the worst thing to have stuck in your head ;)
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I actually love the song. Hate the ending. Too many feelz T-T
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Oh no!!
At least you don’t think the song’s about drugs like some yahoos out there.
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anather lovely writing i see here its beautifull thankyou for shareing...
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And thank you for commenting :D
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