Sorcery in the Dream Village
[Linguistic brainstorm for a later creation]The Most Dangerous Writing App (TMDWA) #4
Stream-of-Consciousness Writing Exercise
Bundle of sticks which hover
Suspended by the mind that pulls.
Arrogance which corresponded to the
Degree of devotion with which the others
Addressed the appearance of a face
Becoming one that's not my
Own but what is more
Sinister that sits
Bringing all matter under its control
Was it I who pressed? Was it I who, becoming
Impressed, gave worship to the beauty
Feminine internal which sat like
The kaleidoscopic peafowl
Against me?
Flew far, upon a foreign wing
Becoming the mere amusement
That toyed with me
Fire, Ice, and their many
Transformations and
Well-versed becameth
A cavern mountainous with feeling
For now, seduced, I was
Embroiled into simplicity
And shunned the past
In ignorance.
I created this using the five minute session option in "The Most Dangerous Writing App,". While using this website, you can't slow down or stop for more than a couple seconds or your work will all vanish! Today, I used it a bit differently, as a brainstorm for a poem I'm going to create later. It could be considered a "brainstorm" or a "linguistic sketch." Here's the unedited result:
Fire of the dream
Bundle of sticks which hover
Arrogance which corresponded to the
Degree of devotion with which the others
Addressed the appearance of a face
Becoming one that's not my
Own but what is more
Sinister that sits
Trigger that manipulates
Bringing all mater under its control
Was it I who pressed? Was it I who, becoming
Impressed, gave worship to the beauty
Feminine internal which sat like
The kaleidescopic peafowl?
Many times the assumptions
Flew far, upon a foreign wing
Becoming a mere amusement
I gamed and lurked with
Fire, ice, and their many
Transformations and
Well-versed became
Imagination brought me into
A cavern mountainous with feeling
Where had my power gone?
For now, seduced, I was
Embroiled into simplicity
And shunned the past.
This is my fourth post in this series. This time, I did a bit more editing than before, adding an entire line to the first stanza. I didn't like the results of this session very much, but I am sharing these in the hopes that someone might benefit from seeing the creation process, which is beyond "likes and dislikes," good and bad. Let us destroy the myth that only some people are writers! We can all create if we use the proper tools to practice. Later today, I will post the finished product of what this poem turns into / inspires, and you can compare, if you like, to reference how it influenced the "real thing." If you want to join me in this exercise, you can use "tmdwa" in your tags (the most dangerous writing app).
Wholeness,
@d-pend
8/11/17
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Thanks for the information. Interesting statistics @screenname!
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Oh @d-pend if this is not a finished poem, then I wonder how the finished one will look. You got me. Also thank you for sharing the most dangerous writing app, not sure I will be able to use it, because writing for me takes forever. It is hard to get the words out any way shape or form for me.
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I know what you mean about it being difficult to get the words out. I've been using this tool to get quicker and less judgemental while writing. This is the fifth day I'm using it, I think.
The "real" poem later will probably differ by being more evocative rather than "obvious" (show, don't tell,) a bit longer, and hopefully more emotionally impactful/ dreamy. We shall see!
Try out the site & don't be too afraid to fail! You can treat it like watching a five minute YouTube video. It's just a form of entertainment, if you have the right attitude of just having fun :D
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Bwa-ha-ha ha haaa.. Now look, what the two of you have made me do:
"What? What in the world would I be writing about? This is truly ridiculous. I have to admit. I am in a panic mode. No way to go, no way to stop. But why? Why the torture that I've bestowed upon myself? This path. A jungle, no less. I see no path. Just clutter. A clutter of no-thought. Oh, no, It's vanishing. Slipping away. A blankness. As my mind. This could not be it.. This clutching, striving to hold the nothingness in my grasp and failing. Failing miserably. And what then? What now? How does one continue down the non-existent path. Oh, my, oh my, oh my. And yet the struggle still stays the same. I have no way out of this. (But through, one might say). But, alas! No. This is just merely - RIDICULOUS! Yes, I said it. Now deal with it and carry on. Nothing to see here. Really. May I now relax and sip my cup of tea? Yes? Brilliant."
(shrugs)
Least it has that bit of my "voice", I guess.. xD
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Whahaha! Awesome! It sort of reminded me of C3PO's voice @josie2214. Hehe.
@d-pend I will give it a try. I see Josie had fun with it. ^^
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Do it! The shortest is a 3 min session :)
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Wow, yes, C3PO's voice really saves it a whole lot.. xD
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@josie2214 nice!!
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Ok! It's now finished @m31! Let me know what you think of the "real version" :D
https://steemit.com/poetry/@d-pend/the-lecture-and-leisure-of-a-fiery-teacher
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I do so like your style! Boone???? We're practically neighbors :D
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Thanks! Really?? I just moved here a month ago and I'm loving it! 😃 The mountains are awesome
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Yep. I'm about an hour northeast in Alleghany county. :D
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wow its looking so nice
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Thanks @mishad5! Try "The Most Dangerous Writing App" here if you like!
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Burning desire never looked so cool! ;)
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😃 * T * Y * V * M * 😃
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!originalworks
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Interesting writing experiment. Vibrant photo to use for your inspiration, too. Following you, upvoted, and resteemed. Nice to meet you @d-pend!
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