THE DEEP END

in writing •  7 years ago 

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We lurked, ten legions, beneath the surface of the not-waters, motionless and in wait. Still and still and still the not-waters had to be so that the Others would come. If We moved a muscle, the Others would flee, and we would have to wait longer. We could see the rippling figures as they passed, peering into the dark not-waters and saw Us not. Steady, heart beating a little too fast, body a little too stiff We held our breaths. Then an Other would appear out of the midnight forest and come to look at itself or drink from the not-waters, The poisonous silt forming a greenish film around the rim of our hiding place.

As the Other knelt, its pure, delicate skin reflected in the pool, We felt our lips receding, revealing fangs our mothers would never have recognized. Still, and still we waited.
A single red blood drop in the pool sent a ripple of nostrils flaring. Hearts that beat too fast pumped harder still, and we could feel ourselves growing harder. Still.

The Other dipped its hand in the not-waters and one of Us, near the surface, shot out and grabbed the Other, pulling It in utter surprise into Our feeding ground, Its legs waving madly as it bleated. But it was ours now, and too late.

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Ten legions rushed toward the Other as it stared, wide-eyed and terrorized at the foaming, grinning mass that slipped in from all sides, long teeth and psychotic grins.
We swam like eels in oil, slick and hard, slashing at the lamb we'd caught. Cutting and biting, where the frenzied We could reach. The We behind fought each other for a taste, a drop, a morsel. Blood filled the not-waters, cloud-like, expanding and roiling.

Viscera uncoiled, and a voiceless cry bleated from the Other in the form of a gaping, unbelieving mouth, a "Why?" that went on, and on, and on, until We clamped our powerful jaws around its skull and tore chunks of bone to spit, knowing we were in the right.

We whispered, grinning, cackling and cooing. We shrieked and yelled and hissed, in a cacophony so shrill, the Other's eardrums could do nothing but burst.

Pop!

We filled the Other's gaping, slashed holes with our turgid selves as we bit the meat that hung from its face in streamers. Pissed ourselves. Fought ourselves. Slits for eyes daring anyone to deny our right.

"For you! For your own good! To save you from evil!" We sussurated into unhearing ears, grasping the other's skin in Our talons, strips of shredded, tattered flesh hanging like streamers from bones we'd marrow-gnawed, and fucked and chewed. All while gutting our prize.

Then our work was done.

For a moment the bones floated clean, and we stopped, looking at this piteous thing sinking deeper into the darkness of the not-waters. To the poison-silted bottom. To rest. We stared, victorious, grinning madly like Kings meting out punishment to the unworthy, our bellies full, cocks soft again.

We stared at those bones descending, and returned our attention to the banks of the drowning pool, knowing that the sacrificial lamb which had sated us would return.

As one of Us.

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  ·  7 years ago (edited)

Indeed deep... I will have to declare this post @originalworks

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  ·  7 years ago (edited)

Mans this is truely deep... you have have to sit me down and break some details down for me.

Lot's of word play there mate.
Word twist...
By the power i have vested in myself.
I hereby knight you today as a WordSmith. Sir MichealCJ

Hahaha. @dante31 please I am still working on my dictions.

Even me am confuse. Please break it for us.

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He didn't write it. I'll take the compliment, though.

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You're welcome :)

Scary... How you can see yourself from the angle of a predator or carnivore.... Uggh!

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I don't kiss and tell @banjo

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So lovely

Thank you for reading

So so super deep.

Wow. Nice work. Did you steal this directly off my blog? http://www.trode.ca/short-story-deep-end/, or did you get it from the Writer's Group I used to belong to? Either way, this isn't your story, and you couldn't even tell people what it's about, which is pretty telling in and of itself. You have no idea what I meant by "the not waters". Take it down, thief. Write your own works.

@chineduadoh don't you try this to a whale ooh. You can get flagged

Like serious?

I can flag you now for spamming on my blog. But what will I gain to see your reputation fall

Woooow!, absolutely wonderful.

Thanks Mehn!!!

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Hi @michaelcj. You have been of so much help and encouragement to me. But you really need to teach me hope you get this inspiration of writing such a long story. I really enjoyed it

Sure I will.

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I feel you bro

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Thank you. Since I wrote it, I'll take the credit, thank you.

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Nice to meet you too

Heavy on a soul... Especially one that can see glimpses of themselves in your words.

The depths of your pen are an abyss one can get lost in. Still digesting some bits!

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Thanks for your positive comment

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It's so captivating... I don't know why I kept seeing sharks and humans, limited imagination here.

Wonderful. Truly inspiring.

Thanks you for reading

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Wow! And I was not engrossed not in these words My eyes sunk deeper and dwelt within them till the last dot

Much appreciated. I'll take the credit, since I wrote it.

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Does that mean since I wrote it, I'll get paid for it? That would be nice.