I like how you're setting up the world this family lives in and slowly building the suspense. The only challenge I have with this scene is that I think you kept mixing up Irving and Lucas. Lucas put his bag down and picked up the picture, but Irving is the one who puts the picture down when his dad calls him. Just a few other little edits needed, and this is good.
RE: Irving Williams and the Lighthouse Ghost--part 2--Steemit original
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Thanks for the catch. I'll fix it.
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