Ok, I came to read your stories. This was an interesting story, go Larry! Haha. Keep it up. :) So here are my thoughts:

The Good Stuff

I like that you structure your stories by breaking the text into multiple paragraphs. It's not good to have too long paragraphs, as it makes the reading experience tiresome. Well done on this part! :)

Also, using multiple images in between the story really helps to illustrate things and it gives me as the reader a break from reading. Looking at pictures is always nice.

Possible Things to Improve

Try to divide your stories a little bit by using some titles when it fits (h1, h2, h3, etc. inside the: <> brackets). Also remember to utilise bold and italic if you want to highlight something important (or give a side note about something), this makes for easier and nicer reading experience.

Just my personal thoughts. :) Good luck for you, and have a nice day!