RE: Writing a book, and looking for constructive feedback

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Writing a book, and looking for constructive feedback

in books •  8 years ago 

The easiest start is to separate yourself from the character. People don't know you, and therefore don't want to read about you. Create a main character with a fascinating back story and refer to him in the third person. This is a novel, not a monologue, yes?
Second tip would be to change your first paragraph. You're jumping the shark too early. Perhaps your story could start 24 hours before the virus is known. This will give the reader something to invest in, and allows you to swing back around in the final chapters to reference the beginning, showing that the story doesn't end bad. People love that happy ending shite. Or perhaps you could keep the paragraph but rephrase it so it appears to be coming from a local news station. Or maybe it was read from the newspaper by a man waiting for a bus?

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Hi, thanks for the suggestions, I can see where it would be better by detaching myself from the story and will try re-write this later today. I will also look at the first paragraph for re-writing or possibly losing until later in the book, and will let you know when i have done it and added a bit more to the story

Oh, and also thank you for your second comment about it sounding interesting, as the only feedback I normally get is from my wife who might be classed as being slightly biased

I'd like to add that this book is fascinating. I would gladly pay you 100steem at current market value ($10usd) for a copy of this competed book.