Original Song - Hanging Out With the Wrong People

in dsound •  7 years ago  (edited)
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This is a great tune! Very strong bridge that I enjoyed. Everyone loves a good piano solo too:)

@samvan I consider the bridge the other "A" section in this tune. It's A-A-A-A-A ;)

I get it!

the truth behind your song amazing @cosmicvibration. Wrong peoples is always making the habits. so stay far away..

Sounds great. Thanks for sharing.

[**DISCLAIMER : Thie is only MY PERSONAL opinion] Another good, shareable one : https://twitter.com/TranscriptJunky/status/1007510314110222337, and (in my opinion) EVOLVING bit by bit - more polished instrumentation, MUCH improving vocals and backup vocals. etc. My main SNIPPET of feedback based on this new song relates to what I was detailing about the rhythm of the lyrics. This aspects is certainly mproving, but let me show you an EXAMPLE by doing a fun experimental rewrite/polishing of the lyrcis above. Keep in mind that my main focus is polishing the RHYTHM of the lyricsto be MOST in line with the FUNKY/JAZZY/POPPY style of your (current) sound. I think that by looking at my revised lyrics you will see the logic. Even better would be if you could do an "A/B test" by remaking this sound with (my or your own) slightly revised lyrics, just to see how tweaking the lyrics can have a SIGNIFICANT effect on the overall sound and song. Again, this is PURELY my CONSTRUCTIVE opinion, BUT is based on some "sound" theory (pun intended ;->)...

Doing the things you shouldn't do
Saying the things you shouldn't say
Hangin' [-] with the wrong people

Try[ing] everything that you see on TV
Giv[ing] in to peer pressure
Giv[ing] in to fear pressure

Doing the things you shouldn't do
Saying the things you shouldn't say
Hangin' [-] with the wrong people

Let your heart go where it could never go
We [should] live together
We can live together
We can live as one

Doing the things you shouldn't do
Saying the things you shouldn't say
Hangin' [-] with the wrong people