Glad to see You finally posted this one, Sir. Hopefully the feedback on Steemit will give You an incentive to finish writing it.
i'm also glad You kept the conversation between Drevin and lucia the way it originally was. It's a little bit of a stretch to think Drevin's dialogue came from a six-year-old, but considering that He's royal-born and has been through a lot (watching his Father order his mother's death, for example), it's not impossible to believe He's more grown-up than His age would suggest.
i really like the way Drevin doesn't apologize for His power over her even as He comforts her. That makes the point of how this society has raised Him to accept His superiority as axiomatic. He truly does treat her as a beloved pet, neither an equal nor a prisoner, and it's going to be quite intriguing to read how she responds as she grows up under her Prince's care.
But then again, You know me well enough to know my interests. ;-)