Island - fiftywords challenge
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Nice story!
It really creates a scene where a few worn out people on a boat, see an island.
But they can't really trust their senses anymore, so they don't know if it is a mirage or their imagination.
So they hope it is real and when they get there, they realize it, it's 100% real!
Perfect ^^
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50 words is always so tough. At least with this one i kind of had a clear picture as soon as I saw the prompt. I think that you nailed it with your comment though.
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Did the picture inspire the story or the other way around? Also if you don't mind a mild critique, I'd change the last line to "It wasn’t until they felt the sand beneath their feet, that it then became real for them." :)
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For the fiftywords challenge I always write the story first. I take the prompt and let my mind put together a scene and then try to get the wording to fit it. There is always a bit of switching and swapping with the sentences to write the story in exactly 50 words, so I definitely take your critique on board. I wouldn't be 100% happy with the last line either but it's the only way that I could make the story fit. It's usually easy enough to find a picture that matches in with it.
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I forgot about the 50 word limit. I'd take the "then" out of the last line to fit the criteria. So the last line would read "It wasn’t until they felt the sand beneath their feet, that it became real for them." What was the prompt for the story? I can well imagine if you're trying to make the story fit that you'd be chopping and changing lines and have to be ruthless with word choice.
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This is the link to the latest one if you have any interest. There are two prompts a week and while it is fairly new as a challenge it has a dedicated little following. https://steemit.com/fiftywords/@miniature-tiger/fiftywords-stories-round-up-and-theme-for-weekdays-5-island.
Ya, I have to give it to you. I like your line better. I won't change it out of artistic integrity 😝 But it flows a lot better your way.
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Thanks for the link. If I have time this week I'll try and add a story. :). That's it, stick to your artistic integrity, at least you'll be a man of your word, or 50 words anyway! ;)
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A simple, subtle sound.
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